Oh, the rain

How long shall we stay, love?

The rain's pouring down ever so lightly

pressing shards of glass into our backs

one by one and slowly at that,

how long did you say?

{I'd stay here forever if you asked me to,

The rain feels like showers of my love for you,

showers I'll never get the chance to feel again.}

How long will you hold me here, dearest?

The lightness has rained rainbows of lust, you know,

pouring the words from my eyes as if tears escaped,

but it's just the rain, I know it's just the rain.

{Why do you shield my eyes from the lightning, precious?

Why do you cup your hands over my ears to break up the thunder?

Why do you smile lightly, when you know it only hurts me?}

How much longer will we drench ourselves in rain, darling?

Do you feel the same feeling as I do, when you stare into my eyes?

Do you feel the same feeling as I do, like the world threatens to consume you,

but you'll do anything but allow it, when you're standing here with me

In the rain?

{My clothes are wetting down further, sweetheart,

I don't know how much longer we can stay, before the waters sparkle further,

and show you my broken heart you're not supposed to see,

but you knew didn't you? You knew from whens we came.}

Reviews

[Lauriegirl]

Beautifully written piece...Well crafted.

[Icarus Thoreau]

One of the things I like about your writing is the ability for it to change, and the variety of styles you use. Something, I'm working on, but a gift that comes to you naturally. Keep them coming.

[Just Me]

Lovely. There was a lot of emotion in it. It flowed easily. Like the many other pieces I have read written by you this is just the same. Written smoothly and beautifully.

[Kiri Nells]

I was almost certain that I already reviewed this, oh well, here it is: such great emotion behind this, very deep and well told. The structure and flow is so smooth. Great write!

[Ruth]

The rain here compliments the emotion :) You have a talent of telling a tale though your poetry, that is not easy to accomplish, but you do it well love, I can see I am really going to love your work :) xx

[Ravyne Hawke]

Beautiful.. I love any poems about rain and this one is excellent. Only one critique.. it is "whence" not "whens" in the last line.. such a minor detail.

[laughinglullaby]

I enjoyed reading this a lot. "I'd stay here forever if you asked me to,
The rain feels like showers of my love for you,
showers I'll never get the chance to feel again", this was my favorite part very sweet but also very sad :) keep up the good work

[Judy Ponceby]

beautifully sad......

[c.m.]

{Why do you shield my eyes from the lightning, precious?
Why do you cup your hands over my ears to break up the thunder?
Why do you smile lightly, when you know it only hurts me?}

Oh, oh oh, this broke my heart...you have such amazing words...

[LovelySparrow]

"The rain's pouring down ever so lightly
pressing shards of glass into our backs
one by one and slowly at that" -Absolutely gorgeous