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Last month

Last month

A Poem by fattycbreezy52


Last month I worried about communicating with complete strangers.

Last month I indulged in activities in the areas,out of practice.

Last month I gave my hundred percent

Last month I toiled till the end

Last month I did the work of separating husk from the grain

Last month I boldly faced the situation without any dread or dismay

Last month I met the pals long lost and forgotten.

Last month I found a new place away from the premises

Last month I gave a new examination for choosing a career thereby making a progress

Last month I felt happy like never before.

Last month I got back that leisure time which I had missed thoroughly

Last month I spoke to her about his memories

Last month I enjoyed the rain with a loved one on the rooftop

Last month I wrote and wrote until this month

Finally came around.




© 2016 fattycbreezy52



Author's Note

fattycbreezy52
Well,Well,Well, that's my very first attempt at writing something very easy. Wanted to try out something new. Don't hate me. I have always thrived on complexity.And yes, I haven't given the full stop after each and every line. That was deliberate. Right now, I am just tired to go about with this. Thanks:)

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Seems that last month was almost too long and you suddenly realised it.. so much conformity perhaps and POW! ' let me move on', says you. Amongst that were the emotions floating to the surface, sweet and kind thoughts.. but then, still that seemingly relieved finish to a month.

Okay so I'm wrong and you're trying-out a form of poetry to see how it turns out .. and your reviewers will tell you how it's touched or escaped them. Tis a clever exercise or ploy, a neat display of routine. thoughts and real emotions combined.

Why should anyone hate you... you're experimenting, searching words and self, that is super fantastic! Aim for the moon and go a little crazy if you want... and without apologising for it :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


fattycbreezy52

1 Year Ago

Haha. Hey beautiful! This is not the first time I am writing. I have written hell lot.But the thing .. read more
fattycbreezy52

1 Year Ago

For your* lovely analysis
Good use of repetition. Time does control us. Sometime life leave us content or in a mess. The words left the reader with something to think about. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


fattycbreezy52

1 Year Ago

Thankso a lot , Coyote:)
fattycbreezy52

1 Year Ago

Thanks* a lot.
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

You are welcome. I always enjoy your work.
We spend our lives waiting for the next month, the next vacation, the next new something or other. It seems you spent your month well. I especially liked "I enjoyed the rain with a loved one on the rooftop" such a nice feel to that imagery. Never apologize for your words. Write as you feel and it is always the right way. Lydi**

Posted 1 Year Ago


fattycbreezy52

1 Year Ago

Aaaw, you are very kind , Lydia :) thanks a lot:)))
When I read your author's note & comment on another review, I get the feeling you are struggling with labels & expectations. Here's what I wish for you: That someday you will feel completely free to write whatever you want, whenever you want, however you want, without feeling it needs to be classified in any way at all. Let's face it, most people don't like what we have to offer, so why waste energy responding to such critics? We can only focus on the people who feel our message resonates with something inside them. The closer you get to BEING YOURSELF & writing YOUR TRUTH, the more often you will resonate with others of like mind. As for this poem, I'm not crazy about repetition in general, but I like the way you chose specific examples from life to show us what the month was for you (((HUGS)))

Posted 1 Year Ago


fattycbreezy52

1 Year Ago

Your words are full of motivation, honey:)
Thanks and keep supporting. (((*hugs back*)))
Nice thoughts, a remembering poem... I enjoyed your simplicity and thoughts here... I wish I had a last month like that...

Posted 1 Year Ago


fattycbreezy52

1 Year Ago

Well what you read above is a f*****g piece of simple s**t. Yeah!
Someone told me that my wri.. read more
Inject Positivity

1 Year Ago

Well let them think what they think, poetry is an art, it's meaning varies from reader to reader, I .. read more
fattycbreezy52

1 Year Ago

Thanks for your kind words ..Even I don't think that my writings are complicated:)

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Music,dancing,singing,acting,dubbing,writing and playing with voices are my areas of specialization/existence. Being a Literature student,my love for Keats,Coleridge and Blake led me all the way to t.. more..

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