Life's Broken Records

Life's Broken Records

A Poem by Fear Corrupts!

A broken record - life that is.
Night follows day,
While anger follows bliss.

Now is- what once was.
Good day and then goodbye,
Time says just because.

Truths are there - & denial lingers behind.
Imagining is prevalent,
For the terminally blind.

Things go unnoticed- or perhaps just pushed aside.
Fact is given,

Yet reality hides.

Lights start the show - while you carry out the drama,
Letting go of the problem,
Is the major dilemma.

Life comes to slap you- or maybe you just finally kick yourself,
For ignoring the patterns,
Of the repetitive help.


© 2009 Fear Corrupts!



Author's Note

Fear Corrupts!
Now, this is the first poem that I have written in quite some time - it shows - so bear with me.

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Imagining is prevalent,
For the terminally blind. - Holy crap! I love these lines!

First time in a long time? Well, there isn't any dust on you! No, honey, this is perfect!

Letting go of the problem,
Is the major dilemma. - How sweet it is! Yes, perfectly written!

Wish that I could say these lines,
perfectly written, down to the rhyme
were mine, mine, all blessedly, gloriously mine....

Great write! And thanks for your review...and this is for sure going in my Favorites! Love the title, too!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I absolutely love this poem! I can't exactly pick out an exact reason why... Perhaps the play on words or the way you phrase some images and ideas. All in all, it is excellently done ^^

Posted 8 Years Ago


i like it... very deep... Great write i think they say

Posted 8 Years Ago


So I like this.
It's very true.
"Lights start the show - while you carry out the drama,
Letting go of the problem,
Is the major dilemma.
Life comes to slap you- or maybe you just finally kick yourself,
For ignoring the patterns,
Of the repetitive help."
Reminds me of teenagers. Damn things don't know when to quit.
GReaaT WrittTttE
-Elissa

Posted 8 Years Ago


it doesnt show at all!
this is really great.
im definitely adding it to my favorites.

this is my favorite part:

Life comes to slap you- or maybe you just finally kick yourself,
For ignoring the patterns,
Of the repetitive help.

Gahh its so good and so true!


Posted 8 Years Ago


Beyond bearing with you - this is great! One has to really take in the message to completely appreciate it, although the words alone are well put together.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Imagining is prevalent,
For the terminally blind. - Holy crap! I love these lines!

First time in a long time? Well, there isn't any dust on you! No, honey, this is perfect!

Letting go of the problem,
Is the major dilemma. - How sweet it is! Yes, perfectly written!

Wish that I could say these lines,
perfectly written, down to the rhyme
were mine, mine, all blessedly, gloriously mine....

Great write! And thanks for your review...and this is for sure going in my Favorites! Love the title, too!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Wastedville, Canada



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