Watching Fate Pass By.

Written as song lyrics- to be read slowly.

Breathless- watching fate pass by.

The truth, the love, the pain, the lies.

What's strange, what's right, and what's wrong.

Certain matters belong where they belong.

 

Attached, apart, regress, and restart.

Loved, the lost, the shattered, injured hearts.

 

Grasping- for shiny smoke in the air.

Can't catch, can't trap, can't hold, can't bare.

What's here, what's there, and what's gone.

What changes as time moves along.

 

Attached, apart, regress, and restart.

Loved, the lost, the shattered, injured hearts.

 

Elements- missing from their place.

The needed, the special, the loved, the erased.

What's different, what's cold, what's new, and what's craved.

The wanting of what was, not what came.

Reviews

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Yes, it could very well be a song. It's very good.

[Last Lying Look]

So I definitely read this out loud so I could get more of a feel for it.
It's very nice. For some reason it reminded me of 'Don't let them see you cry' by manchester orchestra;
Not the words but the way it all fit together.
"The wanting of what was, not what came."
Like the essence of that. It;s wiseeeee.
Great write Moll.
-Elissa :)

[Stephie204]

fantastic!

[SilentDreamer]

Flows well, has rythym, and the message shows through. It also works well in a song form. Awesome job, great poem. Keep it up. :D
P.S. Thanks for the reviews.

[Naomi Montana Walsh]

I loved the sort of frantic pace this takes on it adds a feeling of frustration ..well done