Our Place

10/3/16

If I fly high enough,

Will I escape this life?

Let me bathe in the illumination of the moon

And decorate my body with twinkling stars--

Will that make me pure?

In a distant universe 

Where my hair is blue, 

And my eyes sparkle with stardust--

I am yours;

We are together in Our Place.

In Our Place,

The weather is always warm

Because the sun of our extrasolar planet

Understands that I cannot withstand cold seasons. 

In Our Place,

The stars always shine brightly each night,

But we never take them for granted

Since the stars are within us.

In Our Place,

I am yours and you are mine--

The love we share is purer than a newborn star,

And I am not drowning in self doubt.

I will dream of this lovely place,

But that is all Our Place can be--

A distant dream 

Struggling to fight against reality

And rise above the surface of fear.

Reviews

[ReedWrite]

Wow...this is a powerful piece.
I love how you structured it...the stanzas describing Our Place, have a different format, which sets them apart. I love the lines: Let me bathe in the illumination of the moon
And decorate my body with twinkling stars--

Great job on this!

[Esther]

Thanks so much :) I really appreciate your review and sorry I just now saw it!

[maria ( rose)]

excessively elaborate.good texture throughout. Very well done!

[Esther]

Thank you!