unicorns in the rain

If you could escape yourself, would you be happy, or would you wonder endlessly who you used to be?

the rain dances on the pavement
tapping my cheeks
sliding across my back
slipping beneath my hammering feet
keeping time to the rythmless beat
of the sky's cold tears.

darkness walks beside me
shadows are my freind
muffled silence echoes loud,
hidden streets reverberate the sound.
if this is a dream, it's far too real
the unicorns here are made of steel
their manes braided with shattered hope.

my mind is under a formless cloud
not one voice, but a racous crowd
Of thoughts, competing, bleeding
filling my head with noise
i run from them all, i flee
i must escape, leave behind
my mind.

it chases me down the empty street
i run faster, faster, slicing through the night
off balance, plunging flight.
muffled whispers scream behind me,
faster i run, i must escape my head

my thoughts now melting in the fog,
sinking to become puddles on the street.
the unicorns step in them, silver hooves
smashing, rippling my mind
if i ever find myself again (never)
i will not be the same.

On I run, wondering who i am
afraid of the answer
the rain pours down, like a silent dancer
kissing the world goodnight.

Lost i wander, watching the cracks
beneath my feet, the water sliding softly
over the road as i climb, rippling patterns
washing away what i left behind.

I saw the unicorn, he was made of reflections
i saw my face but do not know it.
lost in the dark
muffled, but alert
i forgot i was there.

i tasted the rain
and stopped, then fell
i lay down in the road, drinking from the sky
the unicorn is crying
but i don't know why.

Reviews

[Wynter Ignatius]

As a fan of the rain, this caught me more than most on that fact. Still overall a wonderful piece of the pains we all feel, the thoughts overflowing from our chaotic brains and the way we come to deal with the demons and shadows we carry with us.

Find those escapes where you can - we all need it at times and so few often listen or follow through to finding it.

[Dark Heart of Winter]

Overflowing thoughts was exactly the feeling that inspired this :) i was trying to capture both the feeling of churning, roiling thoughts building up and bubbling in your head ubntil yiou want to scream, and the feeling of a walk in the rain while messed up to try n escape those thoughts. And i;m actually writing a book where the hero enters his own mind and explores it and awakens memories and flees from inner demons and tries to acces his subconcious, which is embodied and acting against him. its gonna be good :)

[Wynter Ignatius]

That would be something to read.

[forevermore1218]

[Dark Heart of Winter]

your review is blank sweetie :P

[forevermore1218]

lol i said i loved every bit of it. It gave me the feeling of child like wonder with a taste of chaos. perfect

[Kasey Miriam]

flawless flow absolutly wonderful.

[Dark Heart of Winter]

Thank you! :) i worked on the flow a lot for this one.