The sanity tide

 

A Serenaded

Dance

Swayed my perfect

love

To this

Sea of serenity

Of

Soft Sounds

And of soft lights

Once, long ago

 

Sanity

And the outgoing tide

Synchronize

And the final gaze

Strays

And her mind

                Gives way

 

“Stay with me”

She said, holding still

With a fire in her hands

And frost within her wounds

Never shall she forget

The imminent truth

 

“I must now say goodbye”

As I cried

And watched

As her memory died

 

My heart fell pity

As she used to adore

I held down her head

Beneath the water

By the shore

 

So her murderous soul

Be nevermore

Reviews

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

Wow, great storyline! ^^ Yet, so sad. :( All the words you used flowed beautifully and fit pretty well with what was going on through the narrator's mind and then, what went on with ending someone's life. The ending was phenomenal! You never cease to amaze me!... or fool me. :P

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

[ToxicTears]

Beautiful write.....i think you could add on to this and talk about her soul in the after life???? I wanted to keep reading......Great piece.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Wow, powerful work...a myriad of extremes. Thank you. Great work.
Light,
Siddartha

[Lindsey:)]

Beautiful!
i wanted to keep reading:)

[justjenn_2u]

So sad but expressed so beautifully with the comparison of a tide! I loved this poem and I wanted to keep reading! Way to go! You rock, as usual!

[Kara Emily Krantz]

imminent.

and i really like this piece - especially that moment where she's holding in her hands, etc. that was really powerful.

[Seriana]

Dang....I know not what to say! Beautifully tragic? Tragically beautiful? Either way, this was wispy almost, and dreamlike. And.....sad....Nice write Jason!