The Storm Divisioned

 

Leaves lie with perspiration

Dangling by a draft of deception

And so,

It goes with the wind…

 

The autumn trees

Have surely been weathered

By a voice

Of abrupt thunder

Worn

And tethered

 

But diminished not

Is a single feather

Blows away from her heart

Caught by breath from another

A choice of

‘Wherever’

Has settled

Him safely-

As the storm

Of

                Divided

                                Fates

Unite another two

Together

Reviews

[Kara Emily Krantz]

down to his nether?? you lost me there lol, but the rest of this piece is really great. haha :) and i mean that

"Leaves lie with perspiration
Dangling by a draft of deception
And so,
It goes with the wind�"

really impressed with that opening


"A choice of
'Wherever'
Has settled
Him safely-
As the storm
Of
Divided
Fates
Unite another two
Together"

that part is also pretty amazing. so i guess it was the slight middle part that threw me off - it seemed a little convenient, not enough necessary and profound i guess, which those first and last parts definitely were.

this is a great piece, my dear. you're growing and growing as a writer, it's really cool. :) i'm excited to see what's to come

[krissie]

i love the first two lines. really captivated me.

[♥ Courtney &hear..]

I loved it. The opening was brilliant. I loved how it wasn't the traditional rhyming scheme but it still flowed perfectly like a poem. The meaning was really beautiful and it kept me captivated from start to finish.

[Kara Emily Krantz]

and YOU ARE THE PERVERT, NOT ME.


....sort of.