Out

Out

A Poem by James Paulin

 

may come quick or slow

almost all have untied ends

mighty high to way down low

mortality date, everyone attends

fond memories live on though

perpetually love transcends

encore to the show

© 2010 James Paulin


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a minimalist view of death.....nicely stated

the need to rhyme slow and low does make line 1 grammatically incorrect where slow should be slowly

i like the phrasing of line 3 especially...nice word choice

and the memories lingering after death providing an encore to a life well lived! a beautiful thought!


Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This was good

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

absolutely!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great rhyme and flow! You have said a lot in a few lines. Death comes to us all no matter who we are or what we own. I really like the 4th line:

"mortality date, everyone attends"

Well penned!


Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

a minimalist view of death.....nicely stated

the need to rhyme slow and low does make line 1 grammatically incorrect where slow should be slowly

i like the phrasing of line 3 especially...nice word choice

and the memories lingering after death providing an encore to a life well lived! a beautiful thought!


Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

great deal of depth and excellent writing. i love the mortalities date,
everyone attends. So much said in so few words.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on February 18, 2010
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James Paulin
James Paulin

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After 38 years of working as an automotive design sculptor, I retired and have been doing a bit of fishing and writing poems. I've gotten better at both and had some recognition. Most of my poems are .. more..

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