Mask

Mask

A Poem by James Paulin
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Rhymeo

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Pretend,

conceal or reveal

to achieve or somewhat deceive,

to what end?

With style it only lasts awhile.

If self is not sufficient,

amend.

 

 

© 2010 James Paulin


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I really liked the power in the last line. The flow/rhythm felt a little weak in "to achieve or somewhat deceive, / to what end?" But overall, good poem. Nice statement.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Powerful last line. I love the rhythm and the inner rhyme in the fifth line. I'm also impressed by how much it says in so few words. That takes talent.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nice one jp!

Posted 13 Years Ago


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perfect package here, James!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Perfect.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

amen

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Good One! I like this style, too.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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James Paulin
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After 38 years of working as an automotive design sculptor, I retired and have been doing a bit of fishing and writing poems. I've gotten better at both and had some recognition. Most of my poems are .. more..

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