gully washer

gully washer

A Poem by James Paulin



pitter-pat to rat-tat-tat

puddles soon submerge to pools

sprinkles turn to dog and cat

streams obey now fluid rules

 

roiling skies boil, snarl and bark

bolts strobe importantly

smoke grey dims day to dark

ducks quack with impunity

 

sprig and bloom exalt in joy

subtly, the crest subsides

Jupiter returns to coy

as old Sol above abides

 



© 2012 James Paulin



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This holds some lovely imagery with rhyming used to good effect. It brought to mind a section of 'Nights in White Satin' by The Moody Blues, as I was reading it...such a haunting melody, your words and rhythm almost a perfect match.

Thank you for sharing,

Laurie

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love the poem- not crazy about the storms you so aptly describe- I suppose it's an acquired taste, he he.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This holds some lovely imagery with rhyming used to good effect. It brought to mind a section of 'Nights in White Satin' by The Moody Blues, as I was reading it...such a haunting melody, your words and rhythm almost a perfect match.

Thank you for sharing,

Laurie

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great use of your rhyme scheme throughout. I like the imagery portrayed through this piece. Nicely written.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this makes me think of my childhood, lots of movement, fun to read!

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This was very well thought out and you know I love the rhyme ABAB perfect

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There's nothing better than a stormy spring day; marks a beginning of change, of sorts. Wonderful flow and vocabulary!

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great rythm. loved it.

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Seasons! Always an alluring subject to read and write about. You certainly have a unique style of expression!!

Posted 1 Year Ago


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yep, just passed overhead

Posted 1 Year Ago


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James Paulin
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After 38 years of working as an automotive design sculptor, I retired and have been doing a bit of fishing and writing poems. I've gotten better at both and had some recognition. Most of my poems are .. more..

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