not your best piece

Not your best piece kid.
sorry there's the trash I'll open up the lid.
are you sure?
did you read it to the end?
it was terrible stupid where do I begin.
your grammar is sloppy.
look at this verse its way too jotty .
just give up kid don't even try.
who's gunna read it let alone buy.
I actually barely read this garbage gritting my teeth.
give it up kid this is not your best piece

Reviews

[C. Rose]

I like this one. It is humble and funny and I think a feeling most writer's can relate to.
Even if the relaxed grammar is to make a point, I recommend breaking this into lines so it's easier to read.

Do you post from your phone? The majority of grammar issues are just spaces and capitalization which can be ridiculous on a phone.

[C. Rose]

Thanks. Much nicer.

[C. Rose]

I like that this is a smidge of hope. "Not your best piece" implies that you can write better things and improve. Though generally is a mean thing to say.

[fitz Roberts]

Yah but that's why were here is to learn and grow from our writing it does look much better point being but my writing as your writing should be to be crictcized say its terrible and I'll write better and with more passion but I also have don't care what you think and best piece or not I'll always find something to jot

[fitz Roberts]

Lmao don't care what you think attitude lol I care what you think rose Lmao help me grow

[fitz Roberts]

Thanx rose helping me grow

[Gee]

Many of us could apply this to our work.Nicely done

[fitz Roberts]

Thanx oddly and ironicly this one is my best jot most writers relate to it but it's still our urge to push our story thru the criticism

[New Theory]

This is a very good piece, the feeling of this poem reached through, thanks for sharing.

[fitz Roberts]

Thanx for reading I'm glad you enjoyed it

[New Theory]

You are welcome

[Kamari's]

Horrible criticism can go to far I believe there is a line between to soft and simon off of American idol I mean why not teach the kid instead of damaging his interest in writing sorry but meanness to a kid is my pet peeves though I did enjoy the writing keep it up :)

[fitz Roberts]

Lol I wrote it to criticize myself in honesty I'm the kid and it's just a witty way of saying even if it's not your best piece it's still can be and ironically this is my best peice I think cuz more writers relate to it

[Kamari's]

There's still a line

[fitz Roberts]

Your right but it's not kid as in child it's kid as in slang term older editor talking to new up coming writer not an 8 yrold writing a paper just so that's clear of what line I was crossing

[fitz Roberts]

You know like Peter parker Clark Kent Jimmy Olsen more of where I was going with

[Kamari's]

Ahh I see and yes I know those guys I grew up learning about their comics and cartoons .

[Emily]

I love this poem! Keep it up!

[fitz Roberts]

Thanx for the read em

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

- Very creative.
- I really like this piece.
- And it's very relatable.
- Nicely penned.

Kaze~

[fitz Roberts]

Thanx I'm glad you enjoyed it thanx for the read

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome. :-)

[Matching Socks]

Lol, this makes me laugh, it's like that review we hope we never get!!
Nice job Skye.

[fitz Roberts]

Lol thanx ance

[C. Rose]

Congratulations!
This piece made it to the top ten out of 373 other submissions of the "Promote Me! (Again)" contest.
For making it this far, if you submit this piece to the "Promote Me!" group library, then I will accept it into the library.
If you win the voting phase (which closes 7/18/14) then your piece will be featured on the "Promote Me!" group and other such promotions.
Link to group is: http://www.writerscafe.org/groups/Promote-Me%21/11216/

So, If you like this piece follow the following link and vote for it!
http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Promote-Me%21-%28Again%29/50038/

I chose this piece because the voice is so real and we can all relate to the concept.
I fun read. Well Done.

[C. Rose]

Boom. This piece is now in 94 more RR lists as your reward. I really wish I had 6 more friends so I could say 100.

[fitz Roberts]

Lmao thanx rose I just saw this too that's awesome thanks for the support on this piece

[Muse]

It makes me smile reading this. Imagine if someone said that in a review to a fellow writer here on the cafe. All ferking hell would break loose. But seriously, isn't honesty still the best policy?

[fitz Roberts]

Lmao of course not but in my case I want honesty is rather know I'm doing something wrong than be doing it wrong and think I'm right.I don't have soft skin and I can always improve.I was kind of picking at myself with this one

[gavinmichaels]

I can relate to this piece on every level. Though it's me telling myself that my writing is garbage lol. Good work FitZ