INNER STRUGGLE CONTINUES

INNER STRUGGLE CONTINUES

A Poem by FlawedByDesign
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The 2nd part to my INNER STRUGGLE piece with "INNER STRUGGLE ENDS" to come at some point in the future.

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INNER STRUGGLE CONTINUES

Pain devours the endless vast white
I find myself in dark impending plight
My dreams breathe a putrid night breeze
Infecting my thoughts with disease.


I stumble into the depths of my mind
Utopia full of life turned unkind
Drowning in misery; I suffer a heavy heart
My body and soul are being ripped apart.


A dichotomy between feeling and action
Leaving me lifeless to my dissatisfaction
Reality is the Mona Lisa of sorrow
Drawn on a black stained tomorrow.


© 2010 FlawedByDesign



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Great visual of the Mona Lisa in sorrow...I loved that. Very dark and apparently I started with the wrong one. I will go and read the first and will impatiently await the third. Your rhyme was very good and did not interrupt the flow in the least. It amazes me how far the mind can take you down a dark and dismal path and how well some elaborate that feeling in words. Great job.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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I prefer this installment to the first installment of the poem, it seems clearer and easier to create the imagery in my mind, and so to follow the meaning. I look forward to the final installment.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Intense. Well written.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Great visual of the Mona Lisa in sorrow...I loved that. Very dark and apparently I started with the wrong one. I will go and read the first and will impatiently await the third. Your rhyme was very good and did not interrupt the flow in the least. It amazes me how far the mind can take you down a dark and dismal path and how well some elaborate that feeling in words. Great job.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is great too, I like it

Posted 8 Years Ago


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I love this writing because I can understand and identify with it. I will read the first part of this if it is posted. Great work!

Posted 8 Years Ago



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Stratford, Ontario, Canada



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The name is Ivan - I'm 31. I am originally from Bosnia and Herzegovina. I left my country in 94 because of the civil war. After emigrating, my family lived in France for 2 years before coming to Canad.. more..

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