Don't Give Up

Don't Give Up

A Story by Zoe

   “Breaking news: five dead and twenty-three injured in the F7 203 plane crash; the beautiful city of Meagrown completely destroyed after the 7.9 magnitude earthquake; new species of spiders found in Peston; good news! You will be able to cherish your past and peep into your future through the time machine designed by world-famous scientists which is said to be completed within the next twenty years; thirty-five year old man looted and ki...”

  “How ridiculous media is! Best known to distort the news and mislead people. Time machine? Seriously!” I thought to myself as the noise of the juice-maker triumphed over the sound of the television.

  It was the year of 2014. I stood there near the window, with my back to the television, contemplating the view outside. Not exactly contemplating the view, but something else. A problem, an issue. An issue that should have been solved by that time. Lately I had been thinking about my future. I wanted to become a successful person when I grow up. There was just one subject which I liked at school. I would have been very happy to shape a future out of it. The only problem was my bad performance at it. I was not at all bright in that subject. This deterred me and I abstained myself from indulging any further into this.

  Days passed just in the same way, with me thinking and thinking, thinking all the time. When a day came that filled me with confidence to pursue my dream. One fine morning, I sat by myself in a classroom of forty students. What else could I have done out there but think, when suddenly the class teacher stormed in. All of us rose to wish her. She wished back and asked us to sit down.

  “So today…” she said,"we are going to look into the lives of many great people who changed the world with their strong determination to make use of this life and with their belief to follow their instincts.”

  The next moment I was sitting upright in my bed, reiterating the words said by my teacher, in my mind over and over again. Somehow I had started to feel confident and motivated to chase my dream. After thinking “again”, I made my decision. It was easy, to take nothing into consideration but my love towards a specific thing, or a subject in my case, with which I could spend my entire life, to determine my future. It was then and there that I took an oath to not give up on my dream and not to sit idle until my goal is reached.

  Two years had passed and I had not yet given up. Day by day I was improving. I had not broken my oath until then and I never sat idle. In fact on my birthday, too, I was sitting in the park, reading a book. It was the auspicious day of 1st February in the year 2016. I could hear the birds chirping, children shouting while playing, rustling of the leaves of the trees and the water falling from a fountain. There was no one in the park except the playing children and me. I was lost in my book when all of a sudden my eye caught a glimpse of a woman who, a few seconds ago, was nowhere near the place where she was then, and was walking towards me. I looked up at her and, as a matter of fact, was terrified to see her looking straight at me. She seemed unwilling to stop in her tracks while moving in my direction. She came closer and closer and finally stopped right in front of me. She looked, indeed, a wealthy woman, wearing expensive clothes, shining heels, and a grin on her face. We looked at each other. Surprisingly, she looked a bit familiar to me.

“Who..o..o.. are.. you…u..?”, I stuttered. Her grin transformed into a big, beautiful smile and she said:

“Thank you.”

Then she took the book, which I was reading, out of my hands, examined it, looked back at me, returned me the book, patted me on my back, and went away silently. And I sat there on the bench, with my eyes and mouth wide open in utter astonishment and puzzlement. The woman soon vanished out of sight. I was extremely awestruck. Thousands of questions popped up in my mind. I cursed myself for losing the opportunity of asking her name. I could not do anything but restrain myself from thinking about her and cursing myself for making this mistake at the same time. I quickly ran home.

  Days passed, months passed, and years passed. I encountered nothing new in life. As time went by, I found myself speeding on the path towards my goal. Almost twenty years had passed since I took the oath. Everything and everyone had changed, except me. I remained the same, exactly the same, just a bit cleverer. It was time to put the hard work, that I had done over the years, into action. I was finally ready to take my final step.

  It was the year 2034. We were shifting into our new home. I was stuffing my books into a big cardboard box, when, I came across a book that acted as a distraction from the tiresome labour work that I was doing. It was a book of quotes. I decided to flip through it as a last-minute motivation. As I said earlier, everything had changed, and that included my mobile phone too. Every now and then it used to update me with the news doing rounds across the whole wide world, even without its owner’s consent. The silence that was spread across the room was broken by a loud, manly voice, which was most probably the news readers’. I was startled.

He began- ”As promised to all the citizens of this world, we are here, ready with the time machine’s first trial run today which is going to be telecasted live on television. Don’t forget to witness this run, which will make history, only on 'WorldWide24*7', world’s most trusted news channel.”

  This left me in shock. They had done it. I could never have imagined this. My mobile phone vibrated and the man’s voice continued to read out the news:

  “If this run is successful then the time machine will be open for public-use by the year 2040.”

  “Knew there had to be some 'if’s'!” I said to myself and laughed loudly.

  I went back to the book of quotes. I had reached the end of the book. Unlike other pages, there was only one quote written on the last page in block letters which said:

  “Do something today that your future self will thank you for.”

  Suddenly I heard a sound that broke my concentration. I looked up from my book and saw that my personal diary was lying on the ground, opened. As I bent down to pick it up, I read that first line that started my diary-entry for that particular day to which my diary had opened itself. I read on and on until I finished reading that page. The day which I thought to be the most confusing day of my life until the last few minutes, then became cleared of all confusions. I understood everything. I found my answers to all the questions that drove me crazy at that time. And then my eyes, that were becoming more and more moist every second, shifted upon the date written on top of the page. My diary had opened itself to the diary-entry of 1st February, 2016.


© 2017 Zoe



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Zoe
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A very interesting short story, Zoe.

Both at once a tale and a motivational script, you have managed to write a well written piece that keeps the reader glued to the story and wondering just in which direction you were taking it.

As for the oath your character had made? I was sort of expecting to find out exactly what it was, but i guess it doesn't hurt to leave something to the reader's imagination.

You are mastering the art of the short story. Keep it up. Well Done.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zoe

3 Months Ago

Well, the oath was to work hard until her goal is reached. Thank you so very much for reading and re.. read more
Doodley

3 Months Ago

Welcome! Any time.



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a sweet tribute zoe,i`m sure they would appreciate it !

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zoe

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you for your time and review. I appreciate it!
 wordman

3 Weeks Ago

you are welcome zoe
Congratulations Zoe,
I liked this story, it really made be think until I read: It's the year 2040" but I was still bewitched by the story I kept on reading and BAM, Mindblown!
Keep this up, You'll be able to thank J.K. Rowling yourself for the inpiration :)

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zoe

2 Months Ago

Aw, thank you so very much for your kind words :) I appreciate it!
A very interesting short story, Zoe.

Both at once a tale and a motivational script, you have managed to write a well written piece that keeps the reader glued to the story and wondering just in which direction you were taking it.

As for the oath your character had made? I was sort of expecting to find out exactly what it was, but i guess it doesn't hurt to leave something to the reader's imagination.

You are mastering the art of the short story. Keep it up. Well Done.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zoe

3 Months Ago

Well, the oath was to work hard until her goal is reached. Thank you so very much for reading and re.. read more
Doodley

3 Months Ago

Welcome! Any time.
It's so interesting and engaging...I loved it...I enjoyed reading this very much.. Will read and review more of ur works cuz I really found them very interesting :)

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zoe

3 Months Ago

Thank you so much :) not too sure if this one's as interesting cause it was the very first I wrote. .. read more
Sofia

3 Months Ago

Is it so?? Coz it doesn't look like a first attempt...it's really very brilliant :)
Zoe

3 Months Ago

You're too kind. Thank you again :)
I love to read stories like this.It drew me in. It's like science fiction, which is my favorite genre. I couldn't stop reading it.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zoe

4 Months Ago

Thank you so very much!
being a debutante, you have done it beautifully,, enjoyed reading this,, some sort of errors can be corrected at times,,, one can provide a touch-up to a photo only after clicking it... similarly skills can be improved only once you start... and being a beginner it happens so no worries for that,,, the you started the story,, it was impressive... you have got a great talent and you can convert this into another level... keep writing... all the best wishes

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zoe

5 Months Ago

Thank you very much for your kind words. It means a lot :)
I enjoyed this story so much. There were a few grammatical errors, but I don't know grammar well enough o fix them. I loved reading it.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alice Maria

5 Months Ago

You are welcome. 😄 If you have the time please review some of my poems. I would really appreciate.. read more
Zoe

5 Months Ago

Sure, I'll soon review some of your works :)
Alice Maria

5 Months Ago

Thankyou
According to me it is a very good story..well I cannot take out the mistakes because I'm not qualified enough for that..but I like it while readin

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zoe

6 Months Ago

Thanks for your time, Farhan!
Critique: (famous scientists which is said to be) which are said - The singular verb "is" does not agree with the plural subject "world-famous scientists"
(thirty-five year old man looted) thirty-five-year-old - missing hyphen connecting the whole subject, the subject being the mans age
(Every now and then it used) it is used - identifier word needed
(update me with the news) update me on the news - "with" is not the right preposition to use in this context
(ready with the time machine’s) ready for the - again "with" is not the right preposition to use in this context
(open for public-use) public use - wrong context
(I read that first line that started my diary-entry) diary entry - wrong context
(that were becoming more and more moist) You have used the compound adjective "more moist" consider using the comparative form of this adjective "moister". This is just a suggestion
( My diary had opened itself to the diary-entry) diary entry - wrong context

Review: Seeing you are from India I applaud your courage, writing in a second language is not an easy thing to do and doing it in English wich is one of if not the hardest language to master. There are some many rules to writing that most Americans don't know or understand them all. I do have a link that will help https://app.grammarly.com it is free to use and will help you with grammar, spelling, and punctuation I hope you find it as useful as I have. I also have links to many other helpful links to other writing tool at the bottom of my lessons of poetry page http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/BearMage/1501893/ if you have any questions feel free to contact me, I will do my best to answer them. Back to your story, I like the fast pace you start with it draws your readers in and what better contraversual topic than the media everyone has issues with the reporting of the news. Well done, I give it five out of five Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zoe

6 Months Ago

That's true! The feeling you get by helping others cannot be replaced by any other feeling. It's won.. read more
Bear

6 Months Ago

It is my pleasure, my regret is that I don't have enough free time to get to all the read request I .. read more
Zoe

6 Months Ago

whoa, in one day? I'm sure you would be having a tough time to cope with the outbursts of the read r.. read more
Wonderful story. The ending was a bit boring because it seemed drawn out. I think it would've been better if it was right to the point instead of the reader finding out and then the story telling us what we already found out.
That doesn't make sense now that I read it again, but I hope you get what I mean.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zoe

6 Months Ago

Yes I do. Thanks a lot for reviewing!

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