People Are Only Seasons

People Are Only Seasons

A Poem by Zoe

In a world where change is the only constant, where in a flash trust turns into treason. It's all thanks to men, but it's okay then, 'cause darling, people are only seasons.
Solemn as rain, furious as heat, or cold, very cold, as snow. Some leave a tan, or a frostbite, oh man! While some leave a beautiful rainbow.
Ever-changing and shady in all their ways, such are the creatures gracing this land. From love to hate, oh that's heartbreak, that dilemma; can we ever understand?
They come and go, making their presence felt, only few make their absence felt, too. They are the ones, who bring air to your lungs, and you never want to bid them adieu.
Sundies of souls you'll meet so be careful, of who you allow in your region. Cause life is a beautiful mess, in which, I guess, people are only seasons...

© 2018 Zoe



Author's Note

Zoe
Exams are round the corner and here I am writing a poem! Just had to get this out, hah.
(Not being bias here. By 'men' I mean humans, not just the males).

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Very good, Zoe. This is a fine illustration of the human condition. People float in and out of our lives constantly.

Grammatically it's not too bad, but there is no need to capitalize words after a comma and the abbreviation of because would be 'cause.
They come and go, making their presence feel (felt), Only few make their absence feel(felt), too.

Your writing is heartfelt and in this case quite philosophical. You do extremely well.

Good luck with your exams.

Posted 1 Week Ago


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Zoe

1 Week Ago

Thank you for pointing that out! Actually, in the beginning, I had all the lines starting from a new.. read more



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It's amazing how beautiful your imagination is.somewhere inside you is a older and wiser spirit far beyond your young years.absolutely incredible to read

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Zoe

3 Days Ago

Thank you, KC! You are appreciated
Very good, Zoe. This is a fine illustration of the human condition. People float in and out of our lives constantly.

Grammatically it's not too bad, but there is no need to capitalize words after a comma and the abbreviation of because would be 'cause.
They come and go, making their presence feel (felt), Only few make their absence feel(felt), too.

Your writing is heartfelt and in this case quite philosophical. You do extremely well.

Good luck with your exams.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Zoe

1 Week Ago

Thank you for pointing that out! Actually, in the beginning, I had all the lines starting from a new.. read more
An overview of humanity in such a short, little poem. Very impressive! I like how human's are reduced to the seasons and how you have made comparisons to their qualities with such a clear eye. An interesting read!

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Zoe

1 Week Ago

Thank you very much. Your words are appreciated!
The realism in this piece, gave me goosebumps. Fantastic job!

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Zoe

1 Week Ago

Thanks much for the review! I appreciate it!
I feel like this sometimes, people can be frustrating to deal with, but I'm a person so someone probably thinks that about me too Lol. I guess we just have to take everyone as they come. Nice write up. All the best in your exams dear.

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Zoe

1 Week Ago

You're right. We're no different from others. Thank you so much, Avia, for your time and review!
Such bleeding heart leftists! Always keen to nitpick the work of others when their own work is rather ordinary! Forget the goons, Zoe. Anyone with half a brain could get the gist of what you were trying to illume.

Objectively, subjectively.......it doesnt really matter. What matters is that your words are infinitely relatable to all human beings.....what we call "mankind" before the political correct nutters started their lame chestbeating.

For people definitely are like the seasons; they come and go, drift into lives and out again. They are hot, cold, indifferent. And we adapt to them with the passing of time. Welcoming some, bidding others adieu.

I enjoyed this write, Zoe. Forget the knockers. This shows a level of maturity in one so young and inexperienced that even these so called gurus can't possibly understand.

Well Done! And good luck with your exams!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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Zoe

2 Weeks Ago

I know, right! This isn't one of my best ones, I know that, too, but I was just trying to pen down w.. read more
I like the way you translated this fine idea into verse. Bravo :)

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Zoe

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you, Suhd. Means much :)
and it`s a good thing,they come and go taking their vile with them..

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Zoe

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks for reading, wordman. I appreciate it!
Wow. Very fine poetry on human nature and life. That's true people just like seasons come and go. Loved the symbolism.

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Zoe

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you, Najam. Your words are always appreciated :)
Najam Us Saher

2 Weeks Ago

You're welcome. ☺
In the last stanza, in the second line, there is a slight grammatical error:
'To grieve they'll you a million reasons.'
Did you mean: 'To grieve they'll give you a million reasons.'?

Grammatically, I believe, the first stanza should be:

'In a world where change is the only constant,
where in a flash trust turns into treason,
it's all thanks to men, but it's ok then,
cause, darling, people are only seasons.'

I wonder if, seeing the words above, you, due to a negative experience with a boy or any other men in your life, attribute treason only to men, when you say 'It's all thanks to men'.?

Although your argument here might seem bias and the subject matter, as a social factor of human interaction, not objectively approached, I would understand if you are writing solely from a personal point of view of experiences to make you attribute human changing nature only to men.

However if this is a general theme, then You'd have to reconsider your intended message and effect for the poem. For if change is a natural human phenomenon, then it should be looked at objectively.

But I strongly believe in everybody's freedom of expression, and therefore embrace the poem for what it is.

I do feel like more could come out of this poem. The ideas are good and well depicted. But I feel as though you rushed the poem.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

emipoemi

2 Weeks Ago

I strongly second this review!
Zoe

2 Weeks Ago

By 'men' I mean humans, all humans. I understand what you're saying and you are right, I kind of rus.. read more
Zoe

2 Weeks Ago

Made a lot of changes in the poem. Take a look, if you please, and do tell me how it reads.

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