what was said

It was something profound he said 
that made me want to linger around 
Itwas something profound he said 
that made me want to take him to bed 
It was something profound he said 
that made me think that I would remember him

it was something profound he said 

that made me long for him 
it was something profound he said. . . 
what was it he said again?

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice use of words leading to the surprise ending. Good words catch our attention. Most times, we do remember them. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

Ha ha! Sorry, maybe it was not meant to be funny but it has a nice hook at the end. Infatuation can be so memorable and so fleeting. I don't know if that was what you were trying to capture but it seems to fit quite nicely (at least for me.)

100 profound somethings

[audrie]

You're absolutely right! It was totally suppose to be funny. I'm glad you liked it! And thanks for taking the time to read this!

[Matching Socks]

Lol! Funny how that happens huh?
Love this for it's authenticity.
Great write Audrie!

[audrie]

Thanks for the review Ance - glad you liked it!

[audrie]

Thank you for the review- i appreciate you taking the time to reading this

[Michael Thrower]

I love how blatant yet discrete this is, and what made it perfect was the last line you wrote asking a question. That question really tied the poem together perfectly; you did a very good job.

[audrie]

Thanks Michael - I wrote this at a time in my life when I didn't particularly care about serious relationships. . . it served me well at the time but I'm glad that I've moved past that. . . thanks for the thoughtful review

[Cory Barrett]

love this. Words are so powerful we realize they have nothing to do with what we say.

[audrie]

Thanks for the review - it's funny how we hold such great meaning in what we say and it seems so important when they are being said - well, I don't know if that's funny or not - just an observation.

[Cory Barrett]

Sometimes its not what, but how and when it is said. Speaking isn't only about the sounds.

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Love your writing style, it's very creative. And this poem was very well written. Nicely penned.

Kaze~ :-)

[audrie]

I just saw this review and wanted to thank you for the compliment

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your most welcome. :-)

[A. Amos]

Chic, stylish and fresh. Thanks for share

[audrie]

I just saw this reviw and wanted to thank you for the review

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like that...so profound i can't remember what it was---

:)

[audrie]

just saw this review and wanted to thank you for the review. . . funny how things seem so profound when you're drinking! ha ha

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, that is true...:)))

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jacob

[zainul]

He said really something profound.