what was said

what was said

A Poem by audrie




It was something profound he said 
that made me want to linger around 
Itwas something profound he said 
that made me want to take him to bed 
It was something profound he said 
that made me think that I would remember him
it was something profound he said 
that made me long for him 
it was something profound he said. . . 
what was it he said again?

© 2014 audrie



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Nice use of words leading to the surprise ending. Good words catch our attention. Most times, we do remember them. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


Ha ha! Sorry, maybe it was not meant to be funny but it has a nice hook at the end. Infatuation can be so memorable and so fleeting. I don't know if that was what you were trying to capture but it seems to fit quite nicely (at least for me.)

100 profound somethings

Posted 3 Years Ago


audrie

3 Years Ago

You're absolutely right! It was totally suppose to be funny. I'm glad you liked it! And thanks for.. read more
Lol! Funny how that happens huh?
Love this for it's authenticity.
Great write Audrie!

Posted 3 Years Ago


audrie

3 Years Ago

Thanks for the review Ance - glad you liked it!
Thank you for the review- i appreciate you taking the time to reading this

Posted 3 Years Ago


I love how blatant yet discrete this is, and what made it perfect was the last line you wrote asking a question. That question really tied the poem together perfectly; you did a very good job.

Posted 3 Years Ago


audrie

3 Years Ago

Thanks Michael - I wrote this at a time in my life when I didn't particularly care about serious rel.. read more
love this. Words are so powerful we realize they have nothing to do with what we say.

Posted 3 Years Ago


audrie

3 Years Ago

Thanks for the review - it's funny how we hold such great meaning in what we say and it seems so imp.. read more
Cory Barrett

3 Years Ago

Sometimes its not what, but how and when it is said. Speaking isn't only about the sounds.
Love your writing style, it's very creative. And this poem was very well written. Nicely penned.

Kaze~ :-)

Posted 3 Years Ago


audrie

3 Years Ago

I just saw this review and wanted to thank you for the compliment
Blackstar

3 Years Ago

Your most welcome. :-)
Chic, stylish and fresh. Thanks for share

Posted 3 Years Ago


audrie

3 Years Ago

I just saw this reviw and wanted to thank you for the review
i like that...so profound i can't remember what it was---

:)

Posted 4 Years Ago


audrie

3 Years Ago

just saw this review and wanted to thank you for the review. . . funny how things seem so profound w.. read more
jacob erin-cilberto

3 Years Ago

yes, that is true...:)))

feel free to visit my page sometime, when you have a mind to.<.. read more
He said really something profound.

Posted 4 Years Ago



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