Go If You Dare

Go If You Dare

A Poem by audrie


The empty waves~ 
that hollow stare
these deep black caves
go if you dare
and I'm

waiting~
wanting~
needing~
haunting~

You

and making mistakes that are hard to correct 
and correcting the past
as I sit and reflect~

and I wonder if it's too late
to find what was lost
is this my fate
how much did it cost

© 2014 audrie



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nice work "few words a lot of meaning" :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


audrie

2 Years Ago

Thanks-for-the-review!I.I'm.glad.you.appreciate.it!
I particularly liked the word play with: waiting~
wanting~
needing~
haunting~

which to me, can be seen as all just smaller forms of one bigger & more intangible experience we stand confounded by in the wake of loves passing, i'm not quite sure how death could ever be as painful as the hopeless romantic... I for one, like you it seems, tend to love all the wrong people.



Posted 3 Years Ago


audrie

3 Years Ago

It is necessary to remain in hopes light. I know that it's possible to have everlasting love, but I.. read more
I'm hoping not too much. Please fill those black holes.

Posted 3 Years Ago


audrie

3 Years Ago

When love is lost it can often leave a black hole within you. . .for the longest time I would fill m.. read more
Michael G. Smith

3 Years Ago

High five. I also had to figure this one out and when I did I petitioned the Lord for his wisdom and.. read more
audrie

3 Years Ago

Thanks Michael!
Nice reflection on the lost moments and savoring the beauty of once beautiful relationship. Up and Downs are essential parts of a long relationship.

Posted 3 Years Ago


audrie

3 Years Ago

Thank you Avinash. . . you always give such thoughtful reviews
last four lines of poem are really nice........very well penned......

Posted 3 Years Ago


audrie

3 Years Ago

Thanks Anne! = ]
WOW, love this poem. It's amazing! :-)

Kaze~

Posted 3 Years Ago


audrie

3 Years Ago

I'm glad you liked it Kaze- thanks for the review
Blackstar

3 Years Ago

Your very welcome, it was my pleasure. :-)
nicely written. if we could all correct the past...

Posted 3 Years Ago


audrie

3 Years Ago

Yes, if we only could - thanks for reading this
Shhhhhhhhhhhoot. This one is very good.
Spot on target.
Nice job girl.

Posted 3 Years Ago


audrie

3 Years Ago

well shoooot! I'm glad you liked it! thanks for the review!

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