Have a wonderful day

For my darling, that gal

Be calm, little dove
don't let the day ruin You
don't let the sun burn You
don't let the people shun You
Be brave, little dove
You will live long
You will breathe long
You will love long
Be patient, little dove
Your love is a gift
Your time is a gift
Your life is a gift
Be mine, little dove
for i will caress You
for i will hold You
for i will love You

 

Be You.

Author's Note

please review harshly. thanks.

Reviews

[Jerbear The Great]

i really enjoyed this poem. i especially liked it when you would say one thing to the dove, and list after it. This is a very good poem, very heartfelt. good job bro.

[Phoenix]

It's kind of hard to review your work harshly since it's always so good, and this one is no exception. But since you said please, I'll say that the title doesn't seem right, and the "Be you" needs something around it. Like stick it in with the others, maybe before "Be mine" so that "for I will love you" can still be the last thing. It shouldn't be taken out, but it's weird to have it hanging there.
Anyway, I really really liked it, it almost made me cry.