I May

Poem for my sister R.I.P (1982-2005) I love you Cris

I may cry of your sleep
But if you are happy, then I will burry them deep.
Days my go by while you are gone
I will sit here waiting, even past dawn
Lives may pass and flowers will lay.
But your things in your bedroom will always stay.
I may look up with my lips slur your name
I may look down with my eyes in shame.
I miss you and nothing can change.
I wish I can see you sitting in the clouds from my range.
I may cry while you sleep
The sight of your face I cannot keep.
The tone of your laugh is slowly drowning from my ears.
I may not be able to hold my tears.
You are strong and leave me weak.
I want to see you again, just give me a peek.
Did your mouth frown when He said you couldn't stay?
Did your knees fall when you floated away?
Did you hear our screams from down below.
Did you fight hard not to go?

You inspire me

And forever your sister I will be
 

Author's Note

:) Enjoy...

Reviews

[-Adam-]

Good inspiration comes from bad tragedies. That's the only thing someone gets in something like that. I have a poem in a since like this you might like, it's called "Like Kin". I am sorry to hear of your loss. Take care.

-Adam-

[forfila]

beautiful ode my dear, such a sweet message to be sent to his resting place. I love it.
Very heartfelt and well done...

Love
Me

[Prose-full]

great job connecting your loss and your inspiration.....with your talent and love for words...
mmhmmm..thats what we do....we transition our feelings to "write"
we are writers..

be well...
i will see you around the cafe,dear....
beautiful poem..

[justjenn_2u]

Very bittersweet poem! The closure is my favorite piece of this poem.

[Laurie Morrison]

You lost your brother? This is bittersweet; the joy of his memory ant eh finality of his passing. I get the sense that the man who died was young. Brother, lover, cousin? Thanks for sharing this.

[J.P.O.et]

Ahhh, this loss of yours has shaped your writing
'The tone from your laugh is slowly drowning from my ears', sad and very clear
Your use of audio, voices, sounds is well articulated
We often describe what we see, the visual, but it can be difficult to do the same with sound
'Did your knees fall when you floated away?', I am stunned by this one had to read that one twice
Lovely piece, I am sure she is looking down saying yep that's my sis and she is a writer
J.P.O.et

[smiggle wiggle]

great job, but i'm sorry about ur sister. :(

[DeAn]

this was sad yet inspring. the only critique I could possibly give is that you may wish to use the built in spell checker so that your poetry is given a once over. all to often the best poetry lacks that special punch due to a mispelled word or grammer. at times it can throw the whole poem off track and leave one to wonder what was intended. this is a very sweet and pleasurably written eulogy of sorts to your sister and I believe that she has looked upon it as it was written and smiled with a peace, knowing she will not be forgotten.
you honor her well my friend.

great job.

l8r g8r
-Tao