I'll Take Care Of Your Broken Heart

Taking care of the one you love.

 

 

 

You are so beautiful when you start to cry.

I know I can’t make you happy, but I’ll try.

Your sorrow is hovering over me like a dark cloud.

Every tear that falls from your face makes my heart scream out loud.

Your hands shiver and your lips quiver because you are lost.

I’ll stay here forever with you whatever the cost.

So lean your head on my shoulder and rest your eyes.

I will be here even after your sadness dies.

And if you were never to wake up from this battle of doubt and tears,

Then I will fight this war for you , and defeat your fears.

Because when you hurt my lungs start to burn ,

And the insides of my stomach starts to turn.

My head feels like it is to blow,

And my heart beats slow.

So sleep my angel, and dream of the good and best.

And as for everything else I’ll take care of the rest.

Author's Note

:) Smile if you like it.

*Smile*

Reviews

[Kara Emily Krantz]

:)

that's my smile. cute ending. :) the rhyme scheme is a bit forced in a couple places, but overall the rhyme scheme works great

"I will be here even after your sadness dies."

love that line. :)

i felt this way over my first love... four years ago... and now... i need someone to feel this way about me

hugs

[Joseph - Michael]

Smiling right back at ya. You've written it so nice and smoothly. I wish there are more people like you, because it seem that there aren't that many people who know what a love really is

Anyway, it's all good there and thanks for the smile...

[justjenn_2u]

This is one of the most nurturing poems I have read on WC. You show the strength of a woman in your words here. The power to transform and nurture. Way to go!

[a Messenger]

:) I don't use the symbols or computerese often, but I'll give you the smile you asked for because I do like it.
This is another fine poem by a great poet.

[Tyler James]

:) This had more beauty than scenery, and said so much more. You wrote with nice emotion and wrapped it up well. I wish someone would take care of my broken heart like this! x

[stipe]

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You are so beautiful when you start to cry

my twisted mind finds that line funny... i once read a Hagar cartoon where his wife is pissed off at him and he tells her: "You're so beautiful when you're angry!"
"Well," she replies "then that's not going to change!"

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:) This is great! It was powerful! I loved the structure. It just pulled the whole poem together. This is really good!

[Nesha]

:) Yes I loved this poem! "Because when you hurt my lungs start to burn" I love that description. Definitely describes that when you lover is hurting you are hurting too...

I love your rhyming. Most of my stuff rhymes too..

Sending love your way!

Keep writing!

[Travis Lawrence]

:-)

I like it, yes, it's honest and touching.

One suggestion, though, try playing around more with your rhymes. It's fun! All of them here and in most of your other poems are perfect. I love reading near-rhymes :-)

-Travis

[forfila]

*smile* I love it...