Angel of One Wing

Angel of One Wing

A Poem by Frieda P
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A very dear friend of mine sent me that wonderful picture, which inspired this. As survivors, we've always called ourselves one winged angels. Enjoy.

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Angel
 with the fractured wing 
whispers
 on a zephyr's snowflake
catches
 the tears of sullen eyes
blowing kisses
 per messages of love
         bubble wraps 
your heart for safe keeping 
floats
    on a periwinkle cotton candy pillow
no broken element
 can deny your potent power
                 like a candle flickering
 in a strong gust of wind &
crashing roar of waves at high tides fury
the cries of great warrior's 
           forging survival in battle
no wreckage
 will snuff your courage nor strength
soaring ever so softly
 to save the lives of myriad crush
carrying the other one winged angels
 with felicitous fortitude's 
conviction
 onto billows of silk
 for a safe place to gently fall


                                                                        
                                                                                       
                        

                                                             

 

© 2013 Frieda P


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I found the assonance (sullen eyes, roar of waves) and alliteration (cotton candy, potent power) to be distracting. I'm not sure if you planned those things, but I prefer seeing them in a romantic or humorous poem. Maybe it's just me.

Because, this is much more than just sparks and fire. This is strong and straight-forward. "no wreckage will snuff your courage" is, for me, the lines that best animates the poem.

And I got here from the "heart over mind" contest, which asked to review a poem that's already entered in the contest. I thought it was a great, nimble idea. Hope you reviewed someone's poem too.

Good day. Keep writing.

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Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thank you kindly for your review, as for the cotton candy, I wanted something light and ethereal...d.. read more



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Very descriptive and dreamy.. Nice nice.. Kudos!

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Posted 11 Years Ago


Beautifully done... one winged angels... hopefully there will come a time where their broken wings had mended and they could fly freely once more. Good job. ^_^

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Posted 11 Years Ago


I found the assonance (sullen eyes, roar of waves) and alliteration (cotton candy, potent power) to be distracting. I'm not sure if you planned those things, but I prefer seeing them in a romantic or humorous poem. Maybe it's just me.

Because, this is much more than just sparks and fire. This is strong and straight-forward. "no wreckage will snuff your courage" is, for me, the lines that best animates the poem.

And I got here from the "heart over mind" contest, which asked to review a poem that's already entered in the contest. I thought it was a great, nimble idea. Hope you reviewed someone's poem too.

Good day. Keep writing.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thank you kindly for your review, as for the cotton candy, I wanted something light and ethereal...d.. read more
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A step beyond eloquent, your treatment is so delicate and inspiring that it has to be marked as one of your best works.

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Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Wow, thanks doc. This one is very special to me. Much appreciated.
Such a beautiful vision that shines like flaming sunbeams through deep black storm clouds that too often surround us... Yes... we are not meant to be alone... may we learn to fly with the wings of others as well as our own. You inspire us, dear poet.

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Posted 11 Years Ago


I love this , it's soft yet strong, quiet yet speaks volumes.

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Posted 11 Years Ago


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Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thanks for that great review Corset.
this is beautiful , Frieda, and in a more serious mode now, are we? you are the quintessential romance poet when you aren't fooling around and having fun with words, which i know you so love to do (as do i) and this is proof positive of that!

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Posted 11 Years Ago


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Frieda P

11 Years Ago

You're making me fall in love with you more each day....thanks
quinfinn

11 Years Ago

careful what you wish for...rumor has it i'm a keeper!
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Hmmm, never had one of those! I love a challenge...
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this is a tender writing indeed. highlights of some marvellous poetry too!
"kisses per messages of love"
"great warriors forging survival"
just,.marvellous - accented by the absence of punctuation, i might add

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Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thanks jay, means a lot coming from you. Yeah, hardly ever punctuate whilst I write poetry, I don't .. read more
Lovely. :) Excellent piece. (:

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If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..

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