~As I Recall

...and you fluttered by me,

       the sweet little thing that you were

 landed in a puddle of crimson tears

             that had pooled around my feet

the moon was full and the air still crisp

             yet I couldn't see clearly

you shared with me the secrets of the ages,

            how colors dance,  that fireflies & stars are related, 

                      and feathers are really secret messages from angels

i listened in utter amazement 

                  my eyes no longer a somber shade of grief

you touched my hand 

         and the universe had begun to sparkle

when you touched my heart 

              is when the music began to happen

                        i danced fearlessly

 on these puddles  that had become crystalline  comfort

my spirit roared with the fervor of galaxy's exploding

   a simple moment,

        a shared touched, a revival of soul

 it was then I realized the dead of winter had passed, 

spring had sprung wildflowers

     colored in zest, painted by sunshine

     that danced in fields of liquid fire

 my rapture was ignited

       in shades of destiny & hues of lusty acceptance

as I recall now, I never even caught your name

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

Would the woeful secret whispers of the universe be love? The ecstatic jumping of two spirits longing to join, as if destined? Love, at first site?
Twists like yours simply amaze me, and I scarcely have the brain to match. Wondrous poetry, as are all of them~

[Frieda P]

Your review is music to my ears, I am humbled Tai, thanks so much.

[TL Boehm]

you touched my hand
and the universe had begun to sparkle
when you touched my heart
is when the music began to happen
i danced fearlessly
on these puddles that had become crystalline comfort
my spirit roared with the fervor of galaxy's exploding
a simple moment,

You do this so well. This bursting emotion.

[carol burgess romance]

beautiful...how a touch or a look can change our entire emotions at any given time..good read

[Nayan]

Wow! So beautifully crafted phrases and lines, that tell about the mother nature's changing forms :) Though I like more of the rhyming style of poetry, still this "free form poetry" was a pleasure to read and kept me attracted till the very last word!

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chu..]

I appreciate the arragement of word and the imagery used behind words. well done.

[InsanityWriter]

Beautiful. :) I really liked this one!

[Frieda P]

Thanks Insanity, thrilled, I think this is probably one of my favorites.

[Barbara Walker]

i would drop the "is" in "is when the music began to happen" It interrupts the smooth flow in this piece. You always write with such great imagery and description. Thanks for sharing!

[Frieda P]

Thanks Barbara, ha funny, I'm sure Pete would tell me the complete opposite...

[Chloe]

How... How... did you write something of this caliber??????? This is amazing!

[Frieda P]

Wow stunned, that just might be the best compliment I've ever had, much appreciated Chloe!

[victoria]

A wonderful read that takes you on a magical journey to an exhilarating end...I feel great after reading this....I just love it when a poem does that.

[Frieda P]

I know that feeling victoria, and I'm so jazzed that you got it from this read, much appreciated!