In Silent Words

Collaboration with Jack, the Master of rhyme & romance. Thank you so much my dear friend, you raise me up. ♥

In Silent Words

 

I sat upon a cool zephyr waiting for my true love

seasons passed without a tug upon my heartstrings

winter took a fall, within summer's heated grip

spring’s poppies never sprouted their happy essence

 

Here within this day dream my heart it breathes the air

Finding but an empty scene within this prism’d view

Colors bathe my body as so I am much aware

Loneliness my constant friend now waiting here for you

 

i tried  to rise above the sun

the moon kept calling out my name in chant

only darkness danced in the pale of night

i lay my head upon the shoulder of surrender

 

Tears now form the mist a’ drench of all that I do see

Weeping fluent as the moon which falls on me this night

Star light open canopies of gemstones shining free

Blur beneath the vision as my heart does hold this sight

 

to find a sweetness in my own name

Of every season lone of dreaming

love shed a crimson tear in a whisper

In silent words which have no meaning

Reviews

[s y e]

Oh my, wow! This was so..... beautiful! There is so many beautiful, passionate lines in this write guys. For some bizarre reason while I was reading this, the song, You Raise Me Up was playing in my head, haha. I dunno why though.

"Star light open canopies of gemstones shining free
Blur beneath the vision as my heart does hold this sight"

The imagery in this piece was amazing, there was so much. It was a like story came alive on the screen. You guys really aced this piece. The collaboration was great!

Going in my favorites. 100/100

[Frieda P]

So jazzed you liked it farfalle, it's not hard to look good when Jack's got your back. I agree with the line you picked, of course it belongs to the master!

[s y e]

Oh yeah, featured review! Woohoo! :)

Haha, does it? Aaaaah, definitely the master then! :P

[Frieda P]

Oh Yay...and yes, the master! ;-)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

well answer because you are blonde!

[s y e]

I haven't a scooby what you mean John...

[beautiful dreamer]

it not the orignal scooooby its the fake inflatible scooooby! lol i'll explain myself in pm's

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

i tried to rise above the sun the moon kept calling out my name in chant.......gorgeous write Frieda.....may your words always flow as they do now.

[Jack...]

Dear Neva, thank you so much for your kind words. I feel very fortunate to have had the opportunity to work on this with the always amazing Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Neva, I don't pay Jack enough for all the lovely comments he makes, so thrilled you enjoyed this one. ;-)

[Ken Simm.]

A troubadours lament in a court of romantic love.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Ken for stopping by. It was my honor and priviledge to work on this beautiful poem with a very beautiful woman. Frieda brought the essence, I just doodled in between

[Ken Simm.]

As it was an honour to read, Jack. You are more than welcome.

[Frieda P]

I paid him a lot of money to say that Ken, thanks so much for stopping in!

[Tai Ryens]

A medieval journey throughout the unknown world while time progresses without you? Brilliant. Oh, how I do enjoy the thought of swimming through the oceans you cried yourself, while the world twirls without a thought of you. Your protagonist made this said journey hard on him/herself (probably misread a line), and is aware of that. Regret plays a major role within this.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Tai...it is definitely open for interpretation

[Frieda P]

Brilliant review, I like the thought too, thanks Tai, much appreciated.

[Junert]

Wow. Awesome. Great ending.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much. Glad you liked it.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Junert, much appreciated, Jack put the ending together, melded our two voices together.

[Junert]

The power of two then. I really love this.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Wow, I really believe that collaboration is equal to BOOM! love the stunning word play, it is elegant. The words expressed brilliantly and flowing smooth in the space of love.

Congratulation to both of you for this lovely work.

My fave.

i tried to rise above the sun
the moon kept calling out my name in chant
only darkness danced in the pale of night
i lay my head upon the shoulder of surrender

[Jack...]

Marc, thank you so much. Working with Frieda was a joy and a blessing to me. Her poetry always amazes me and I loved having the opportunity to write with her.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Cool Mr. Jack hoping more to come.

[Frieda P]

Ha BOOM is good, thanks so much Marc! :-)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Welcome Frie :)

[shallimarRose]

This was just so pretty to read.. The lines just seemed to mesh and I could not feel two different writers if I had not read the fore note..Wonderful job you too.. xo Rose

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Rose. Frieda wrote the intital verses which based on their amazing beauty were a huge help for me. She is always an inspiration to me.

[Frieda P]

Such a lovely review shalimar, thanks so much. xo

[shallimarRose]

Well you are both great...

Jack I have done a few collab pieces in the past and would love to do a rhymer with you some time.. I have also been called the queen of rhyme on other sites a few times.. ;)

[Frieda P]

Woo, the King & Queen together! Sounds like a plan.... ;-)

[Jack...]

I am more the court jester

[Frieda P]

Court jesters don't dig that deep into their souls and turn out magnificent works of art day after day.....

[Jack...]

Ok, then I am the quart tester...I like beer.

[Frieda P]

I've had beer on occasion, it hardly makes me rhyme so fine...

[Jack...]

Did you drink it through a straw???

[Frieda P]

You can hardly drink boilermakers through a straw Jack, d'oh.

[Jack...]

Ok, well what about with one eye closed on a crooked barstool in the middle of the bay? Hu-huh?

[Frieda P]

Which eye?

[Jack...]

Are you right handed or left handed?

[Frieda P]

Ambidextrous, now what?

[Jack...]

Exactly...see what I mean?

[Frieda P]

Of course, that's first hypothesis I learned.

[Jack...]

That's not fair, first Ambidextrous and then Hypothesis...nobody told me ther was going to be a test.

[Frieda P]

Don't you just hate when life sneaks up on you like that?

[Jack...]

yeah I do, but you know what...I am merely the jester, none of this stuff has any affect on me. Did I ever tell you I was Hambidextrous? I like both honey cured and virginia baked.

[Frieda P]

Wow that's amazing, me too.....

[Frieda P]

Say goodnight, Gracie

[Jack...]

Good night Gracie

[shallimarRose]

LOL no wonder i show i have 20 comments.. hehehe... hugs..

[Frieda P]

Hahaha, we just wanted to drag you back in! x

[shallimarRose]

And not one word to me from Jack about doing a collab with me..

Chicken?? lolol just kidding... huggs, Rose

[Frieda P]

Oh I'm sure he will, he was too busy being the jokester!

[shallimarRose]

LOL.......

[Barbara Walker]

Okay, my friends, I gotta say the poem made more sense to me as two poems. Maybe it didn't mesh as much as I needed it to mesh. I think stanzas two, four and five make a great poem and stanzas one, three and five make a great poem. Great imagery in all the lines!

[Frieda P]

Two & four are Jacks, the last one we melded the two together, we do have different styles I can see how you'd think that, thanks for your thoughts Barbara...glad you liked it.

[Dream Weaver]

This is the reason why we have collaborations... ;-)
Simple amazing!

[Frieda P]

Thanks Joe, so glad you liked it, I was so happy it turned out this well.

[Dream Weaver]

Don't mention it young lady.. ;)

[Veronica Chandler]

There is so much I love about this collaboration that I scarcely know where to start. The mixing of the seasons in these lines, "
winter took a fall, within summer's heated grip
spring’s poppies never sprouted their happy essence" Such a delightful way with words! I found the idea of the, "I tried to rise above the sun the moon calling out my name in chant" spoke to me in a language I cannot describe. This piece moved me on a profoundly deep level. Exquisite!

[Frieda P]

I'm truly enchanted by your kind review Veronica, so thrilled it spoke to you.

[Veronica Chandler]

I am enchanted by the piece

[Frieda P]

You made my night, no, actually my week. :-)

[Veronica Chandler]

;-)

[Jack...]

Veronica, thank you so much for reading this fun project. Frieda is such an inspiration to me and it was an honor to work with her on this.

[Chloe]

Is she a fairy? That was all I could think of when I pictured her in my head. A tiny, helpless fairy with thin, papery wings that whipped in the wind. I think I'll be using the fairy thing to write a poem... thanks for the inspration! Great poem!

[Frieda P]

So glad to have inspired you Chloe...thanks for your lovely review.