Sad Butterfly Tears

An orphan of love, a victim of circumstance

she stood upon the ridge of a precipice

leaning over the edge wondering if she'd find peace there 

she felt nothing but a mighty wind calling her name

             promising eternal peace ever after

she shut her eyes and the sight took her breath away

just then, a lovely butterfly perched upon her shoulder to say... 

 'you are not done, I'd given up hope too,

  but a mere lowly caterpillar, fuzzy without a clue,

   look at me now, I'm magnificent, some decisions

   are made for us, other's we have control over, 

   you too can find your heart's calling and desire'

She opened her eyes to feel the sunrise on her frown

her tears dried up and she thought if given half the chance

I could fly too, she took the leap,

... the butterfly's message had failed in a very tragic way,

                                          ~she cried real butterfly tears

If there's any kind of moral here it's surely, we can try our damned best, but we can't save everyone. Sad, yet true. 

Author's Note

Won 'Captivating', title in the 'Who can write the most captivating poem or story?' Thank you kindly....

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

I totally agree with the moral lesson and if you will alow me to say that is all true but they have to be willing or able for some are not willing and some are not even able. Love conquers all at the end and I hope we all find inner piece... An excellent subject and write kind lady...:)
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[Frieda P]

Thank you kindly sweet Sami, inner peace would be nice.

[Sami Khalil]

True, true , true...You are welcome...:)

[InsanityWriter]

The way you write is mesmerizing... So sad and beautiful... This is truly a masterpiece.

[Frieda P]

What a delightful review, thanks so much IW!

[~Nina~]

I thought this was amazing. An excellent use of words and adjectives, as well as details. Also, the moral was marvelous and the genre is so obviously tragic. Wonderful, piece, keep it up!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much for your visit and review Nina, muchly appreciated.

[Tai Ryens]

You shouldn't outright state the moral.. Takes the fun outta things, lol.
Ah, but I love it nonetheless.~

[Frieda P]

That was the whole point! Lol ;-)

[Tarry Franck]

Very emotional piece - Job well done my friend Frieda

[Frieda P]

Thanks Tarry.

[Tarry Franck]

my pleasure

[TL Boehm]

This is true. Humans, no matter how full of light and life and hope they be - can't fly - at least not in the physical sense like a butterfly. This is a deep one and a tragic lesson many of us learn the hard way.

[Frieda P]

Yes unfortunately, are there any lessons in life that aren't tragic?

[Peter H]

good write , and very nice lesson taught at the end

[Frieda P]

Thanks for stopping by and your review, much appreciated.

[Baby Ricochet]

Very bittersweet tale. Don't jump, ever.

[Frieda P]

I think I know I can't fly, thanks Mark....

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

WHEW what an emotional piece... we have to realize that sometimes we cannot save everyone, but we can honor their memory by living on with their memory in our heart.

[Frieda P]

That's about all we're left with Dale, thanks so much for your kindness my friend.

[Tate Morgan]

This so feels like ti is about you. We all learn lessons as we go.We cant save everyone.But even one is better than none.If we can save ourselves that is sometimes enough

[Frieda P]

Always a struggle in the aftermath, thanks for your thoughts here Tate.

[s y e]

Wow, this made my heart bleed. It was sooo emotional and extremely sad. I couldn't imagine losing someone like this, I can't imagine how hard it is for you, but you're an amazing strong woman, with some friends on here that are here for you, if you need to talk or vent at, (me and others)

Sweet title, this was really touching.

[Frieda P]

Your words touched my heart sweetie, thanks so much.

[s y e]

The pleasure was all mine. Used up a box of tissues, but we're okay... xox

[Frieda P]

You're too sweet Sye..xoxo

[s y e]

:-)

[Frieda P]

Mwah, when you coming back? I'll protect from the big bad wolves. ;-)

[s y e]

I'm back!

[Frieda P]

Ha YAY....now stay put silly goose ;-P x

[s y e]

Lol, Okies! X