~Gentle Quiver

on my mind...

...and then I paused in the moment 

                          to devour the thought

Reviews

[Jack...]

I simply love how you do love, or at least love of before, in this case. Your words always have a certain silkiness to them, smoothly flowing across our eyes in alluring and sensuous stanzas. It is really hard for me to put my finger on the correct words to describe your style of writing except to say...this is definitely a Frieda. Amazing my friend.

[Frieda P]

Awh Jack, you always give me a swelled head, I had to giggle at a Frieda, sounds like something you might order off an Italiano menu....did you order the afrieda? Lol...I'm being silly now, no sleep will do that to you, what I meant to say was grazie mille my dear friend! x

[Opeyemi Jide-Ojo]

i agree with Jack; i can't exactly say how you write. i guess magical would suffice

[Dr. Wood ?]

first of all..I LOVE this song

secondly...and ONLY JUST....Another great write of love...Love.....I agree with King Jack in that you have a unique style is there madness in your method?

[Marie]

A gentle quiver is all I really need...

[Blue Ivory]

It's hard to find conclusions in love stories. Just when you think you've found the solution, you begin to doubt your decisions all over again. It's seriously frustrating! I normally blame it all on mood swings. The second last stanza stands out. Great work! C:

[Teeya]

This is a beautiful arrangement of a sentimental longing...the fluency of the words paints a beautiful novel of paused moments meant to be felt as the book reads...I love the title...it ties to the idea that remembering love causes his presence to breathe against yours, leaving your being to quiver gently at just the thought of him...the final chapter may have not ended with a kiss but the residuals of those chapters prior to was enough to make those memories last...absolutely beautiful write

[writing mojo]

that is well said set inviting scriptures, just as the muse must be...great piece

[Sanober]

"a gentle quiver".....wow, such a tender way to look at something that was not meant to be. Your words hold a quiet pain and joy known only to one has loved deeply. and lost. A real achingly beautiful write here.

[Sami Khalil]

Elegant to say the least with the soft whispers of love and the gentle quivers of the heart. It has really a dreamy blissful intensity ...Bravo

[SyberRose]

This was very touching.. a gentleness and softness and a sadness all wrapped up into one lovely piece.
Enjoyed Frieda...:)

[Tam Warink]

Well then, let's rewrite the ending. I'm expecting something more than a quiver if/when we ever get together! ;-) {tastefully kidding, of course}

[beautiful dreamer]

to read request: i'm getting there lady i'm getting there! to actual poem: i like how it starts off with an ellipsis so it feels like its a continuation of a past piece, and subsequently is about the past, starts the poem well. if you have an analytic mind like i do i stopped and was like hmm. then the first line using the words "and then" and "devour the thought" behind the ellipsis is like okay what was the context before that? but not in a bad way in a way thats like brilliant that i would never in a million years think to use probably cause i could never write something this deep. okay now that i've written a paragraph on your first line let me move on to the rest of your poem! i love your extended metaphors in this and all your other writing. your just so talented. lastly i love how you wrapped it up making a full circle with a gentle quiver and how well it wraps up the slight second of thinking caused with the first line, showing how it was a continuation, no, more like an ending to a love story gone bad. beautifully written and executed piece frieda. well done.