'Still'...

If the sun were to set in your eyes

as the moon settled over my soul 

falling to the depths of an ocean's mile

I'd 'still' remember how you made me feel

& everyday that ends in why I'll miss you

Reviews

[Jack...]

Five lines...that's all it took for you to touch my heart with this poem. We all miss people and it affects all of us in different ways...but when the missing is constant and how they made you feel is only found in memories, then the sadness is a pain we only wish we could miss. Frieda, you are an amazing poet and I am so thrilled I have the opportunity to read you and call you friend.

[Frieda P]

You've truly touched my heart, this one apparently wrote itself, I had a high temp and when I awoke, it was sitting in my notepad, obviously never far from my mind, thanks for your kind heart and being such a good friend always Jack...x

[icelandicblue]

This piece of poetry is so moving. It's gentle longing and love entwine the poem in a feeling of total and complete love. It's just lovely.

[Barbara Walker]

If we are lucky, we have someone enter I lives and when they leave, we feel this way. It's amazing how sometimes short poems can convey so much more than long poems. Enjoyed it immensely!

[Sami Khalil]

Short on words but endless on sadness and heartfelt messages...I like the notion of you are still every time you think of her and knowing her presence still. Splendid...:>)

[Rita L. Sev]

This is a gorgeous piece of poetry, Frieda. The one we miss is always with us, but seems out of reach, the sun and the moon... and shadow.

As the butterflies flitted across the page, I realized that it is not two butterflies, but one butterfly dancing with its shadow...

[Tate Morgan]

Oh that felt good I almost forgot what butterflies felt like

[Joyce S. Greene]

You have created some very powerful images to express your deep sadness over the loss of your loved one, Frieda. The accompanying pair of butterflies, moving in unison, echoes beautifully the closeness you felt to the one who is no longer there for you. Really fine poetry!

[Ruth]

So much said here...the depths...illumination, remembered, needed and damn, nostalgia always sings loudly! Hope you are feeling better hon? xx

[Lydia Shutter]

The poignancy of this write found its way into my soul...those two butterflies flitting on the page were a gorgeous accompaniment to your raw emotions. Wonderful work. Lydi**

[Antoñyo]

Your response to Jack was pretty amazing and explains why the first words from me after I read this were, "no regrets"

Thanks for this heartfelt piece of heart&soul.

[Tam Warink]

Marvelous.. really quite excellent, Frieda. Potent, polished and poignant. Thank you!