~How shall I pen thee?

~How shall I pen thee?

A Poem by Frieda P
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COLLABORATION ~ Frieda & Jack

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How shall I pen thee, let me cipher the ways
pure bliss wafting on crystalline seascapes
ravishing the cerulean ripples of time's eye
deep and darkly ranges of mountainous clouds
devoured by eclipses of the moon's rage
 
lyrical verse of a rhythm’d release floating on
sweet chorded ventures in breath-taking time
sheet music love letters tossed to the deep
sandcastle dream waves now captured
in sunset wisdom, tangerine promises whispered
 
 Waltzing on thin ice whilst reaching the stars
dancing under sunbursts crushing burn
you surrendered your heart within my hands
stepping outside reality's gated bridges
i'm flying loftily high on your script'd tunes
 
melting, moon beam reflections in your eyes
pouring into me, slowly, sweetly as I blush
rose garden pastels on your lips…quivering
melodies of autumn leaf descent, lilting fantasies float,
resting within the crescendo of your love  









© 2014 Frieda P



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In every age there is a mechanic determinism that imposes itself upon the art and artist that abides in that sliver of time. It is as though lesser Vermeers have rallied in support of guilders and in so doing have provided bread to the sellers of minerals and oil - the ingredients that grind true art into a framed submission. Every painting has its flaws otherwise it would not be human. This is very human.

100 pearl earrings


Posted 3 Years Ago


5 of 5 people found this review constructive.

icelandicblue

3 Years Ago

I must say that was one of the most beautiful reviews I have read.
Frieda P

3 Years Ago

I so agree......
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Freida P,
"How shall I pen thee?"
This poem was a lovly gem to behold. I read it through once then as an effort to fathom it as two poems (read again.)
I found it quite amazing! I have not had the pleasure of responding to another's words, line upon line as this is.
This little part was really neat! "Sheet music love letters tossed to the deep." and... "tangerine promises whispered."
Thankyou for writeing this; it was a lesson to me of what two can do together.
Blessings,
Kathy.
Ps I have not read your writing before and got this idea from my pages "poems you might like" suggestion.


Posted 5 Months Ago


Sometimes a tumble of imagery like this can seemingly have no recognizable message for me, but I'm happy to say that I'm following your thread, despite the heavily nuanced writing. Every image is well stated & all are woven together nicely, full of contrasts & dynamics -- not a still painting, but like watching a film in motion. Good job.

Posted 1 Year Ago


wow..thats very GREAT..it remined me of Elizabeth Browning's poem "how do i love thee" i dunno why..but that is my poem..
so yeah your poem is amazing..

Posted 3 Years Ago


How did I miss this collaboration by two of my favorites?
Truly another favorite to add to my collection.
Wonderful job you two....every line is brilliantly penned.
100/100

Posted 3 Years Ago


WOW this is one of your best pieces it is m y favorite.
I will be reading this again.
I love these lines. don't be surprised if this inspires me
and I write a poem every thing Inspires me pretty much
thank you for sharing. this just took my Breath away.
I am a Romantic so I love romance and love writes. blessings nice work

lyrical verse of a rhythm’d release floating on

sweet chorded ventures in breath-taking time

sheet music love letters tossed to the deep

sandcastle dream waves now captured

in sunset wisdom, tangerine promises whispered


melting, moon beam reflections in your eyes

pouring into me, slowly, sweetly as I blush

rose garden pastels on your lips…quivering

melodies of autumn leaf descent,



Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Benita c Staebelll - KindredPoet

3 Years Ago

What's his name on here? I will thank you my friend. Blessings
Frieda P

3 Years Ago

It's Jack...just Jack actually. You should be able to find him easily, if not I can send you a link.. read more
Benita c Staebelll - KindredPoet

3 Years Ago

ok let me try if not will let you know thank you. Blessing
This is a gorgeous and a well written piece of art. Thanks for sharing!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much, glad you enjoyed our collaboration!
sheet music love letters tossed to the deep

sandcastle dream waves now captured

in sunset wisdom, tangerine promises whispered

the best lines... who can forget the music of a burgeoning love? who can forget the promises made in the first few days?? who can forget the moments spent in the evrgreens on summernights watching the sunset??
ehhh nice poem!! continue the penning my lady

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Can't take all the credit here, those lines are Jack's, so thrilled you enjoyed our collaboration.
luviva

3 Years Ago

ohh well it was a beautiful peice...
thats all i know
Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Ahh thank you again, I think we work well together, and Jack will be thrilled...
melting, moon beam reflections in your eyes
pouring into me, slowly, sweetly as I blush
wow! A verse I wish I had written.

You have created some beautiful images and emotions. A gorgeous collaboration by two awesome poets!

:) Julie

100/100 moonbeams

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Woo, 100 moonbeams, doesn't get much better than that, thanks Julie! :-)
I love this!! Good work both, and lovely working together like this!!! The start is a clever twist on what might otherwise be a familiar line. "Wafting on crystalline seascapes" is a great line and a powerful image. I love the word cerulean and ripples of time's eye is a very original idea! Sheet music love letters tossed to the deep!!! Wonderful. This is as full of great one-liners as some of Beck's songs on Odelay. Stepping outside reality's gated bridges...Fascinating. Pouring into us ALL, slowly, a very ethereal beauty that can be called nothing else but love.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks Robby, I'm in love with your review, jazz'd you enjoyed our collaboration, muchly appreciated.. read more
Robert Tusitala O'Neill

3 Years Ago

I love the visuals you create together!
Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks again Robby, Jack will be thrilled too.
I like the title to this. Oft times that is the burning question in attempting to string the right words together to make a necklace of language that could remotely reflect such poignant thoughts, feelings, ideas...Thank you, as always, for sharing your talents.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Jack...

3 Years Ago

Joshua., I'll say thank you since I am online. This poem was a collaboration between Frieda and mys.. read more
joshua sky

3 Years Ago

Fantastic work. I will look for more collaborations from you guys as I peruse your respective works.. read more

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