~EXpir'd Dance

~EXpir'd Dance

A Poem by Frieda P


untimely teeming downpours,
     my tears slid down your cheeks
as your heart bled unto my soul
    without concessions revelation's pulse,
alas, beating eyes speak in disclosure 
    proclamations etch'd in blood
envelop'd the yielding surface skin
    strapped to a behindhand'd watch
that read a confession of surrender
   at quarter past indignity and 
half past sinful indulgences
   rollback was warranted
but time had earlier run out
   faith expired on the second hand
dance end'd when the music laps'd
     love died an untimely death

...whilst the band play'd burning violins

© 2014 Frieda P



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Time dripped into the bottom of the hourglass at the same speed in which the rain poured, the tears fell, and the heart bled and dribbled down, only to have your lover realize far too late and try to fix things that can be repaired no longer. I quite enjoyed this one; it's a clever take on the hourglass concept presented uniquely with a metaphor twisted in delicately . . .

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Grazie mille Tai, exactly, always jazz'd to read your reviews..



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The ending of many things,
very in depth thoughts here.

Enjoyed the music you chose to compliment your words,
Trace

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much Trace, you a Leonard Cohen fan?
Trace

3 Years Ago

Don't know that much of him, but definitely enjoyed your clip.
Makes me want to go listen to m.. read more
Frieda P

3 Years Ago

I love him, he's one of my favorite poets/singers, he's even better now that he's older, his voice i.. read more
Love it. It's really emotional. Only issue is lack of caps. But in just picky. Good job, friend!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks, depends on my mood if I use caps or not, muchly appreciated!
Katherine R.

3 Years Ago

Ah. No prob, though!
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Bri
Very strong and deep. I loved reading it. Strong emotions there.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks muchly Bri.
A very innovative yet sad piece. I loved the analogy of love's end to a clock. Wonderfully done!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much Gleb.
Comparing a relationship to a clock. A relationship that has gone cold. Just like the clock that lapsed. Its beyond repair. It crossed that time or place or point of no return. Relationship is complicated sometimes just like the mechanism inside the clock. Once damage through neglect or mishap its too costly to repair and too valuable to replace ... Beautiful piece Ms Frieda ..thanks for sharing

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Seems to me, it's always about timing, thanks for your insightful words Neil.
God, Cohen is such a f*****g genius. You aren't too bad yourself. The end of love.... I just wrote a poem about that myself. Nicely done btw.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

He's still got it too, amazingly this song is about the concentration camps, and the music that was .. read more
Time dripped into the bottom of the hourglass at the same speed in which the rain poured, the tears fell, and the heart bled and dribbled down, only to have your lover realize far too late and try to fix things that can be repaired no longer. I quite enjoyed this one; it's a clever take on the hourglass concept presented uniquely with a metaphor twisted in delicately . . .

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Grazie mille Tai, exactly, always jazz'd to read your reviews..
my tears slid down your cheeks
as your heart bled unto my soul
really good !!!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Grazie mille Ahena!!
Reminds me of a relationship I had once... Well done, Frieda.

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Hmmm, I guess a few have been in these dancing shoes Travis, thanks so much.
Ah, to "rollback" and understand all that went before the death of a relationship... You write with an eye to both harsh reality and wishful fantasy, Frieda. I love your word choices.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks muchly Rita, you're so kind, you made my night.

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If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..

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