~Translucent Renditions

~Translucent Renditions

A Poem by Frieda P


Mesmerized by your emblazoned words, 
   enchanted within your eye's opalesce glints
  your alluring demeanor entices my aching heart
you are the lavender skies pierce'd with apricot diamonds,
  impetus 
zephyrs that transcend me to scintillating destinations
   riveted in your every echo'd illuminating flicker
the intensity in your raging winds never ceases
  enthralled in your fervent thunder intensifying ocean depths
 my spirit is elevated to new heights in flight'd chimera
carried away in rendition's cast vapors your dimensions provoke,
  translucent peaceful renderings within stellar light's tranquility 
forever surrendering in the intense flames that dance unto my soul



© 2014 Frieda P



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Frieda P

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As if standing in the garden waiting for that perfect rose to bloom and before my eyes it appears and it is so much more beautiful than I could have ever imagined. The bouquet of your words my sweet friend is more fragrant, melodically tinted and filled with all of the magic of nature dreams. When you conceive an idea, it forms inside of you, it grows and them it blooms. Soft petals wrap around this dancing poetic score. Lighter than air, as rose petals on a whispering breeze, fliting about like happy butterflies, your poerty is this.

Beautiful frieda...simply beautiful

Posted 3 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Sigh Jack, there's poetry in your words always, I think you should pen this review. Thanks for the .. read more
R. L. Hill

3 Years Ago

I don't typically comment in others' reviews, but dang, Jack. Love it ^^ lol



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"you are the lavender skies pierce'd with apricot diamonds"

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Ha with the same line, or shall I slap you with a new one? ;-) haha And thanks so much....
Frieda P

3 Years Ago

It's Earth, Wind & Fire's Fantasy by the way...
R. L. Hill

3 Years Ago

Oh awesome. Well that fits ^_^
my spirit is elevated to new heights in flight'd chimera
carried away in rendition's cast vapors your dimensions provoke,

Such masterful imagery, Frieda.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks Pryde, I missed this one, sorry....
Ethereal imagery here, crafted from excellent word choices - I love the flowing vocabulary in this one, Frieda!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much Rita, can you tell I was in a good mood that day? :-)
Amazing use of words. I had to read twice. The description was alive and beautiful. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much 2x's Coyote, so nice of you to say my friend.
Again, seeing a lover in the environment that you indulge in seems to be a reasonably common concept in your poetry, and it never ceases to amaze me. Your descriptions make it seem as if that love is inescapable, and that's a GOOD thing, because all there is is beauty surrounding. Well done, I quite liked this.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

I have a vivid imagination, if only love could be as such, thanks so much Tai, always appreciate you.. read more
Where do you get all these beautiful pearls and then make them into a beautiful garland in the form of your poems.. you are gifted :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Ha you're too cute Avinash, this was a good day, have to take advantage of those positive notes. ;-).. read more
You know, I read you and think of so many responses and yet, my fingers hover and all I can say is a HUGE wow...sigh, just damn beautiful love, your poetry always blooms a radiant hue xx

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Woo Poppy, doing the happy dance to your review, thanks muchly luv! xo
Brilliant imagery in your words as always Freida...however I have one question...I found two things a little contradicting " impetus zephyrs that transcend me to scintillating destinations" and "the intensity in your raging winds never ceases". In the first instance you talk about a zephyr and in the second you walk about raging wind...do you mean different effects in two different circumstances? My favourite line "you are the lavender skies pierce'd with apricot diamonds." Brilliant!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Yes, I was trying to show the different dimensions, I actually had poetry in mind when I wrote this .. read more
WOW another stunning poem. :) :D

Kaze~

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Jazz'd you enjoyed Kazie :-)
Blackstar

3 Years Ago

Your welcome. ^_^

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Tags: poetry, fantasy, heart, illuminating, thunder, dance, surrender, spirit, soul

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Frieda P
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If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..

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