Ice'd Lullabye

Ice'd Lullabye

A Poem by Frieda P

Your untouchable promises
     chill'd in my veins
my fragile posies were left
           out in the frosted reign
swept me up in your darkly 
                 abstruse sweetness
etch'd love songs
          on my skin's tremblings
prayers that were answer'd
          with sad weakness
lullabies dull'd my sensibilities
        and dying fortitude
fell on my knees upon
         my own strangled heart
rescuing  me from myself,
          you brush'd lusty tendrils aside
in contemptible silent sighs,
               from the depths of apathy
i need your emptiness to 
      fill my void'd briny spirit
frosted over my convictions,
             i lie frozen in icy drifts of regret  

© 2014 Frieda P



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Frieda P


Seriously, captcha is hellhag!

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This poem is so powerful I'm having a hard time finding the right words to express how I feel about it, Frieda! It's rare that I'm at a loss for words, but I think this is one of those cases.

Nonetheless, I still like it; if you moved me that much, I suppose you've done your job!!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

So good to know Eric, thanks muchly, this one happens to be a favorite of mine, jazz'd you enjoyed.
Eric Pudalov

3 Years Ago

There's the featured review thing again...I still don't get it. How do you "feature" something?



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yesterday I smiled but today I cry and its not necessarily a bad thing....its a real thing. It is why I dont always swing in for a read. Here in your words and thoughts ...it is real....sometimes gentle but sometimes hard. I often leave feeling naked and raw...but I think that is what real poetry is about...truth..emotions..inspirations...hopes...and even doubts. Thanks Freida, maybe I just needed the pinch to remember I am the one still alive

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Ahhh Queenie, your response gave me a shiver, I know it well, perhaps we need to pinch one another o.. read more
Love long lost leaving scars on soul which refuse to heal...Sometimes you can't help pondering over them.
As always a beauty from your stores.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Some scars never heal over, thanks so much Avinash.
Just what i needed to end my afternoon.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks Cassie, enjoy the rest of your day!
"Your untouchable promises

chill'd in my veins

my fragile posies were left

out in the frosted reign"




" i lie frozen in icy drifts of regret "
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This is what I call most perfect poetry!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Woo thanks so much Divya, you humble me my sweet friend!
DIVYA

3 Years Ago

You are the mostest welcome Frieda!
Beautifully written.

My favourite lines:

my own strangled heart
rescuing me from myself,


And

i need your emptiness to
fill my void'd briny spirit



Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much Praveeta, glad you enjoyed.
Praveeta

3 Years Ago

You are welcome dear friend.
you brush'd lusty tendrils aside
in contemptible silent sighs,
from the depths of apathy
i need your emptiness to
fill my void'd briny spirit
frosted over my convictions,
i lie frozen in icy drifts of regret

Some powerful stuff, Frieda. Even captcha couldn't upstage it.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much Pryde, captcha is getting fresh these days.
Very deep and emotional...luv'd it!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much Raymond!
Part of me wants to say "Ice Ice Baby!" but it would probably undermine how knocked out I am by this piece...you've awoke a plethora of emotions in me here, but above all, I'm just amazed by how great a poet you are...I never thought I'd cross paths with anybody this good...yes, it's a great piece Mrs.R ;P xo

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Ha Benji, you're a nutter, I'm going to have to double your check next month you keep this up my sw.. read more
kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

Haha you know I'd probably spend it on Smirnoff Mrs.R...but that's not a bad thing is it? ;) Really.. read more
I really liked the smoothness of this poem with the music. They go together so well. Also, the line
"frosted over my convictions,
i lie frozen in icy drifts of regret"
Really resonated with me. Very good work! :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much, it's about Darien ;-P haha
Shaquana Adams

3 Years Ago

Hahahaha! I guess I deserve that ;)
Frieda P

3 Years Ago

LOL ;-P
I know that it's such a silly reason for liking this poem, but I liked it because of the contrast between your superfluous use of words and the purposefully incorrect use of 'd on loads of words. It was liking a painting with words. Like a contrast of colours, but in grammatical form. Loved it!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

I'm not particular as long as you liked it...ha, thanks so much! ;-)

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