Ice'd Lullabye

Ice'd Lullabye

A Poem by Frieda P

Your untouchable promises
     chill'd in my veins
my fragile posies were left
           out in the frosted reign
swept me up in your darkly 
                 abstruse sweetness
etch'd love songs
          on my skin's tremblings
prayers that were answer'd
          with sad weakness
lullabies dull'd my sensibilities
        and dying fortitude
fell on my knees upon
         my own strangled heart
rescuing  me from myself,
          you brush'd lusty tendrils aside
in contemptible silent sighs,
               from the depths of apathy
i need your emptiness to 
      fill my void'd briny spirit
frosted over my convictions,
             i lie frozen in icy drifts of regret  

© 2014 Frieda P



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Frieda P


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This poem is so powerful I'm having a hard time finding the right words to express how I feel about it, Frieda! It's rare that I'm at a loss for words, but I think this is one of those cases.

Nonetheless, I still like it; if you moved me that much, I suppose you've done your job!!

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Frieda P

3 Years Ago

So good to know Eric, thanks muchly, this one happens to be a favorite of mine, jazz'd you enjoyed.
Eric Pudalov

3 Years Ago

There's the featured review thing again...I still don't get it. How do you "feature" something?



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Haunting and melancholic!


Posted 3 Years Ago


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Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks sweetbind!
My Frieda this is beautiful. It's overwhelming here. "from depths of apathy I need your emptiness to fill...," that line really does hurt. But, the depth of which you describe the crumbling will and inability to notice harm is as your poem title calls Ices things over. Truly a poignant piece.

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Frieda P

3 Years Ago

I adore your reviews, I love when someone gets the 'feeling' I'm trying to portray, thanks so much s.. read more
Write as always and getting lost in it, but took a short break to read friend's and other's works. This if you want to say bone chilling. My fragile posies were left in the frosted rain is a clever play words. Once again, marvelous.

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks BlackRose, glad you picked up on that.
Haunting grace... such lyric composition... beautiful.

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Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much sharonlee, much appreciate your kind words.
Hum... feels of loss to me... times past... hurt... memories... sadness.
Something far away.... makes me sad.
So good writing then:(
:)




Posted 3 Years Ago


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Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Glad you 'felt' it Terry, that's always the greatest compliment. :-)
Such a sad tale. The cold metaphor gives it that empty chill of loss and forlornness.

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Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks Gabriel, glad you felt the chill.
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Beautiful, sadly sweet, to be filled with someone's emptiness to fill your void...wonderful (standing ovation).

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Curtsies, thank you kind sir :-)
ron

3 Years Ago

Bows, it was pleasure kind Ma 'dam.
my fragile posies were left
out in the frosted reign
Nice play on words. What chilling verse.

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks xavier, I was wondering if anyone would pick up on that.....muchly appreciated.
Sad but so expertly written...and though dark it is not overly macabre. It is a pleasure to read such alliterative words. Every line is had me racing to the next intricate, well placed thought. Excellent read, you are a gifted writer.

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Frieda P

3 Years Ago

What a glowing review, thanks so much Shirlena, jazz'd you enjoyed this one.
Shirlena

3 Years Ago

You're welcomed :)
For some reason this makes me think.of drinking....of using alcohol to fill the void knowing that it contains only emptiness. Thus we continue to suffer while trying to find solace and sleep in those iced lullabies. Maybe I'm wrong but its the first thing thar came to mind!

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Men, booze, all the same, fill a void when they're available, suck when you get snagged, just kiddin.. read more
redflutterby

3 Years Ago

Oh I can definetely relate it that way too....lol!!
Frieda P

3 Years Ago

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