Ice'd Lullabye

Ice'd Lullabye

A Poem by Frieda P

Your untouchable promises
     chill'd in my veins
my fragile posies were left
           out in the frosted reign
swept me up in your darkly 
                 abstruse sweetness
etch'd love songs
          on my skin's tremblings
prayers that were answer'd
          with sad weakness
lullabies dull'd my sensibilities
        and dying fortitude
fell on my knees upon
         my own strangled heart
rescuing  me from myself,
          you brush'd lusty tendrils aside
in contemptible silent sighs,
               from the depths of apathy
i need your emptiness to 
      fill my void'd briny spirit
frosted over my convictions,
             i lie frozen in icy drifts of regret  

© 2014 Frieda P



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Frieda P


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This poem is so powerful I'm having a hard time finding the right words to express how I feel about it, Frieda! It's rare that I'm at a loss for words, but I think this is one of those cases.

Nonetheless, I still like it; if you moved me that much, I suppose you've done your job!!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

So good to know Eric, thanks muchly, this one happens to be a favorite of mine, jazz'd you enjoyed.
Eric Pudalov

3 Years Ago

There's the featured review thing again...I still don't get it. How do you "feature" something?



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This is lovely, and very sad and soulful. I think I would say lullabies - unless you want it to mean something else other than plural, and the last line not sure if I would pluralize regret, but anyway, great read.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lyn Anderson

3 Years Ago

without the apostrophe or the plural, but that's just me ...
Frieda P

3 Years Ago

No not that, I changed a line from the original, not important, Scott and the kimmer caught drift of.. read more
Lyn Anderson

3 Years Ago

Ahh, okay, thanks for clearing that up
This one is extremely chilling...cold shoulder and all of that. Once again though, I am amazed.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

KAOlmsted

3 Years Ago

...is this an example of releasing the Kraken?? xD (love you, Jack xoxo)
Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Ha no usually it has to blow your skirt up over your head to be a Kraken ;-)
Jack...

3 Years Ago

No Kimmer, it's an example of an a*****e making up for a stupid mistake he made.
. You met G.H. didn't you?

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

KAOlmsted

3 Years Ago

I know...it's like I'm all virginy and whatnot ;-)
Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Hahaha I'd go with whatnot ;-P
KAOlmsted

3 Years Ago

HA! xD Good call ;-)
Icy drifts of regret..that's a great line.
Woven nicely.....
Some sadness here tho....
As always...you shine.
Scotty

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Scott Metro

3 Years Ago

You are the poet sugar..
Scotty
Frieda P

3 Years Ago

The sugar poet, or poet sugar? ;-)
Scott Metro

3 Years Ago

same thing...both will work;)
This is a great poem, Frieda. Simply divine and really well worded.

// swept me up in your darkly
abstruse sweetness
etch'd love songs
on my skin's tremblings //

These lines are beautiful, it all is beautiful but these lines jumped out at me.

Flip flops & all that jazz!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks, woo I got a 'divine' and flip flops, doing the happy dance! Grazie mille noodlebumble...
I think Scott and I read two different poems? Either that or you are the fastest editor in the history of the cafe ;-) I like both versions. Good ink, lady.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Now I'm perplex'd and kerfuffled haha, never an asshat, maybe the 'B' word, ha kidding ;-) mwah!
KAOlmsted

3 Years Ago

right...the Brit is the asshat...I'm a ...Baroness? Barista? Bi-polar Bacon-wrapped Bovine? (holy s*.. read more
Frieda P

3 Years Ago

You got it, bacon wrapped gooey goodness! ;-D
I love this one Frieda! My favorite poem today!
The line, "I need your emptiness to fill my void'd briny spirit". I know it might mean something different as a separate line, but man did this resonate.
I know we can be giving all we have and it may seem like nothing to the ones we love because it is not what they needed or wanted.
How many times have we heedlessly, "brush'd lusty tendrils aside in contemptible silent sighs,"?

You are penning strong today Wild Thang!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Haha I can usually tell which days you're full of shyte my friend ;-)
 David Scott

3 Years Ago

I do have those days... Ha.
Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Don't we all? You must be human after all hon ;-)

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