Rhapsodic Poetic  Pearls

Rhapsodic Poetic Pearls

A Poem by Frieda P
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~breathe me

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There are times when poetry is just simply, poetry
    words coming together that sing a song or rhyme
  ideal ideas summoned within muse's rhapsodic thoughts 
   more often times about death or eternal life
Love's blindness or universal forgiveness
   pearls of wisdom don'd in a pen's signature 
Grand reasoning of exhilarating proportions
       script'd without fear or apprehension,
             or just fun to roll off the tongue
  Saucy soul sisters serendipitously saunter   
  Bodacious baubles bubble beautifully bound
It's remembrances, past, future and todays
   exalted lovers who cuddle and coo us  
    & those which are the bane of our existence  
Rainbows and stars leaping over cobalt'd blue moons,
       cherished reminiscent of bygone days
Gods, goddesses, fairies and berry, cherry dust
   
Kisses a bazillion miles deep, marmalade delusions,
       hugs that reach across skies, wrapp'd in tissue'd allusions
Dancing upon stratospheres of nectar'd light
 Joie de vivre of pickled posies
   held together with flecks of luminosity's glow 
Apricot and golden threads of an echoes' flow
    indistinguishable like two peas in a pod
  tantamount to polar opposite compulsions
     or scatter'd altered sentiments at random
      tango together to console inamorata's tiffs 
Flamboyant and flashy or restrained, no rules apply
    still playfully submerged on paper
Grandiose finale of rhythms imaginative encore
    a celebration in life's masterpiece of poetic license


© 2014 Frieda P



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"Love's blindness or universal forgiveness
pearls of wisdom don'd in a pen's signature"

My favorite lines.

I love poems which deal with poetry and you nailed this one, Frieda. I love your alliteration in:
"Saucy soul sisters serendipitously saunter" and "Bodacious baubles bubble beautifully bound".



Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Grazie mille Arzel, jazz'd you enjoyed this one, just so happens I adore poems about poetry too.



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And I would take these "Rapsodic Poetic Pearls", string them together in a necklace with marmalade and apricot spice, hang it around you neck and proclaim: "Sometimes it's just poetry"... but oh what poetry..
~~redzone

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Awh you're too kind Curt, thanks muchly, so glad you found this one....x
One that can be worn around the neck of wrist, either way it's touching, well done.

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Frieda P

3 Years Ago

I prefer the neck, thanks again Thomas.
"Love's blindness or universal forgiveness
pearls of wisdom don'd in a pen's signature"

My favorite lines.

I love poems which deal with poetry and you nailed this one, Frieda. I love your alliteration in:
"Saucy soul sisters serendipitously saunter" and "Bodacious baubles bubble beautifully bound".



Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Grazie mille Arzel, jazz'd you enjoyed this one, just so happens I adore poems about poetry too.
I couldn't have said it better myself, bravo!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks Mike, jazz'd you enjoyed this one!
Coleridge said that Poetry was "the best words in the best order." Your poem proves that, and then some, Frieda. Simply poetry... and so much more.

Joie de vivre of pickled posies - ;) Love this!

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Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Woo doing the pickl'd posy dance ;-) Grazie mille!
Oh you have included almost all the subjects at a poet's disposal...one can understand how deeply you love poetry. I love this one Freida

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much, I think we all do....
Absolutely perfectly described...a tower of excellence...verbal skills...imagery exactness. AMAZING! I love this will save to my library!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much Lady Ann, muchly appreciated!
LadyAnn68

3 Years Ago

It almost makes me think of a strand of pearls each one a tower of accomplishment with very valuable.. read more
A captivating poem about poetry itself, and the many faces of it. Well done!

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Jazz'd you enjoyed my rhapsody, what's better than poetry, thanks so much!
This is essentially a grocery store list of poetry forms. I think you carry off some of it quite well:
'or just fun to roll off the tongue
Saucy soul sisters serendipitously saunter
Bodacious baubles bubble beautifully bound'
A 'daringly or admirably attractive showy trinket bubbling beautifully and encircled by metal bands' is inherently meaningless - it's logorrhea personified - but that's the point of your line, that it’s fun to roll off the tongue. There is a way to illustrate alliteration and assonance with some semblance of meaning, but you're just having fun, and I get that.

There is some further beautiful phrasing in this, in your rambling rhapsodic style:

'exalted lovers who cuddle and coo us’, 'Rainbows and stars leaping over cobalt'd blue moons', 'fairies and berry, cherry dust' are all vivid and fanciful. This is like an add for a radio station where they play 3 seconds of Skynyrd, 3 of Zeppelin, 3 of Blondie, etc. - a greatest hits karaoke sample of what you love about poetry. You could improve it by really embodying different styles, rather than cheerleading them all in the same breathless one.

There are a lot of clunky words that weigh this down, make it inaccessible. It's visually appealing, but you overload the imagery by marrying descriptive words with abstract concepts in a way that negates the visual impact. You describe something that itself needs describing, you personify an esoteric ideal. 'tissue'd allusions' and 'flecks of luminosity's glow' are perfect examples of this. On the surface, it's gorgeous rhetoric. But what does an allusion look like? Why can't you describe the tissue-paper on the mantle by the fire, or the crinkled tissue in the triage wastebasket? Why can't you allude to an allusion somehow, paint an elephant in the room through the negative space? Why are you hell-bent on defining how poetry moves you, and decorating the definition with rich language? Your language resource is rich enough, so tell a story with it, don't dress up your dictionary. I'm saying this because as good as you are, you can still improve.

And lastly - I invite you to my rhetorical breakfast buffet with open arms. You can have some nuance nutmeg, some liturgical locks, and even some symbolism-parfait. But can I have my 'marmalade hallucinations' back, please? Read my poem 'A Shameless Poem', published on the 14th, and you'll find the original version of 'marmalade delusions' in stanza 5, line 3. I don't for a second believe this was deliberate. But it's too uncanny for me to let it brew. After all, one of the many forms of the poetry that we all love is plagiarism, is it not? Plagiarism parfait. Sounds even better. Thanks for understanding,

Thaddius


Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 4 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Number one, when someone inspires me I always let them know it, two, the poem I read of yours said n.. read more
Thaddius

3 Years Ago

Perhaps we both tapped into the collective unconscious. Perhaps Cupid shot a marmalade hallucination.. read more
Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Oh you Cali boys are much too fragile, I'm not angry, just don't presume to know how my mind works, .. read more
A truly beautiful take on poetry. Amazing, simply amazing!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks Brittany, glad you enjoyed!

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