Choked on the antidote...

Choked on the antidote...

A Poem by Frieda P

sipping darkness


choked on the bite of your denial
         sipping darkness filled to the brim
throat closed in tasteless shadows
              drowned in contagion's overflow
flowery verbiage stabbing lured
              eyes pour'd of scar'd crimson blood
breath's rhythm, laboriously sobbing 
                of  darkly hue'd rose phrases
scorch'd of white lighting's glaring lies
                      written in your poetic stare
played the game within nightmare rules
            devil kept score in relentless paces
grim were reception'd badinage airs 
             torn into fleshy soul's creations
cut in line for a temper'd rhyme
           pretense for a formidable antidote
no cure for sopping contradictions
                  toying of cut throat's detest'd deceit  

© 2014 Frieda P

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Frieda P

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You need to pour some sugar on that to make it go down easier!! Ha.. ;-p.

Seriously seems someone has swallowed a very bitter pill in the form of some dark realizations. Those thoughts were there all along but when placed in just the right light an epiphany was born. Now theres nothing left but choking down that nasty stuff.

On another note Def Leppard is the perfect way to start the day.... pour some sugar on me...sorry wrong song..xo

Posted 4 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

4 Years Ago

Love is like a bomb, baby, c'mon get it on...ooh sorry was carried away in your review...ha Thanks, .. read more

4 Years Ago know it!! I keep it in the!!

I'm hot sticky sweet...from my head.. read more


Such a dark poem, beautifully written.

Kaze~ ^_^

Posted 4 Years Ago

sounds like a painful game like 2 people just can't stop bleeding the other out like those who get caught up in acts of revenge and vindictiveness. way to capture it the devices used the symbol of the devil keeping score...genius oh and learned a word too "verbiage" ima use that one XD

Posted 4 Years Ago

scorch'd of white lighting's glaring lies
written in your poetic stare
played the game within nightmare rules
devil kept score in relentless paces.

Great poetry. Well said and satuated poetry. Love the way of your description. Mighty feel.

Posted 4 Years Ago

Whew, wonderfully dark. Nicely penned! One of my favorites from you.

Posted 4 Years Ago

My kind of piece. You know this. Devil kept score, huh? Must be some true deceitful words at hand.

Loved this for its raw, dark reality, with a taste of vengeance.

Posted 4 Years Ago

"played the game within nightmare rules
devil kept score in relentless paces"

Very dark poem, Frieda, just the way I like it! Excellently penned, your work always gives me new ideas. "Choked on the antidote..." How fitting for me, currently, considering I've been sick for a week, haha :D

Posted 4 Years Ago

Dark beauty....
cut in line for a temper'd rhyme...
Very nice work my friend.

Posted 4 Years Ago

a dark poem, the imagery finely put together..

Posted 4 Years Ago

Loving this dark delight...good one hun! :) x

Posted 4 Years Ago

A very dark write there chica.It is like suddenly realizing things that you were trying to pretend didn't exist.

Posted 4 Years Ago

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Added on March 19, 2014
Last Updated on March 20, 2014


Frieda P
Frieda P


If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..


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