~ of blood, skin & surrender

a bent spirit

The truth is in your eyes

  lies purs'd upon caustic lips

aim'd at the heart of betrayal 

   round'd the bend of a scarred spirit

the holy grail of taunting deception

  laid upon skin's blistering pulse

physically slay'd of blood & guts

 in a skillfully set death toll

measured cost of its bodily surrender

   shattered the windows of my soul

Author's Note

Reviews

[s y e]

Check that picture, girlie... this is so dark and powerful and just what I love to read.

// aim'd at the heart of betrayal
round'd the bend of a scarred spirit
the holy grail of taunting deception
laid upon skin's blistering pulse //

What the heck can I say about this? The lines above and simply amazing, I loved them, they practically punched me in the face! xo

[Frieda P]

Ha at least it's not spiders ;) Doing the happy dance to your review noodlebumble, oops, never in the face, maybe a shot upside the head, sowwie, thanks muchly sweetpea! xo

[s y e]

Ugh, I had enough in Florida..... don't even remind me. ;-) Always a pleasure, yeah well next time do it personally, it might hurt less. ;-) Words are sharp!!

[Frieda P]

I take it you weren't cuckoo for coco puffs over FL?

[s y e]

Ha, it was okay, I enjoyed it was just too homesick. :-P New York next year, ha! ;-)

[Frieda P]

Now yer tawkin missy. :)

[s y e]

Ha, thought you'd like that. ;-) You're noodlebumble will be an hour away from you in one year. OMG, how cool is that!/

[Frieda P]

Hardly, depending on where you're staying, meet me in Little Italy. ;)

[s y e]

Ha, you know I'll be there a day before. ;-)

[redzone]

Computer ran out of juice earlier about half way through the review I was writing and lost it (me too) but remembering something about thinking how appropriate the song was with your poem. I had never heard it before.. you (or the song) forgot about flattening the tires too.. I mean we're talking shattered windows of your soul here so a few car windows hardly makes up for this pain and sometimes destruction of someone's self-worth... I really don't think people realize what all this does to people.. the harm it does... agree that the picture also adds impact to the content of your poem..

Liked the way you used "taunting deception".. adds a deeper understanding of the pain caused, throwing the lies in your face and you throw this at us so we get it, chew on it and come to feel as you, betrayed, shattered...

Some may see this as just a rant or a woman complaining (won't use the word they would use), but it's more a wake up call I think a courageous poem, a poem more should listen to..~~~~redzone yep, love your poem Frieda

[MAC]

this is beautifully written and laced in dark. you WOW'd me

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Mark, apparently this one didn't go over too big...muchly appreciated my sweet friend!

[MAC]

morons lol

[Frieda P]

Scooby do waffles! :-D

[MAC]

LMAO yes!!

[Frieda P]

I know no one ever busted the windows out yer car, right? ;)