This poem captures the music in words, which is no easy feat. I am glad you included the music along with your poem, it was great to see your thought process in an otherwise thoroughly sensual poem. The visualization was great; the almost giddy babble of eloquent words and phrases such as "rhythm of sun's betrayal". This line flows so well and ties in with the feeling of a flower waving and bending under the hot sun in a field.
I won't try to over-interpret it, because to figure out the poem's meaning to a T would be to destroy it, but even without meaning it is a beautiful read. Great poem, every word was almost tangible.
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Thank you so much for such an in-depth review, thrilled you enjoyed.
Wow, okay so your writing is really good.
Deep and sweet. You managed to grip ones interest for reading this one. I must agree with Sonus de Amnimus - interpreting too much will ruin it. As it is read and understood to its meaning, it is one tangible piece...
i think i am having a writers block..i have not written in a long time...running out of ideas.. :(
9 Years Ago
That happens, I know it did to me not that long ago when I was away from the site, just write anythi.. read moreThat happens, I know it did to me not that long ago when I was away from the site, just write anything down, it'll come to you eventually.
The true nature of its significance....the heart of its bloom.
9 Years Ago
Very nice. Thanks.
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Does that make sense now?
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Yes. I would have said essence of its fragrance. I think I'm too literal in my phrases.
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We just have different styles is all...
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I thought about that but I think words can be played with. In other words I try to be too proper. In.. read moreI thought about that but I think words can be played with. In other words I try to be too proper. In the future I could probably loosin up a bit. Maybe...possibly.
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I love to play with words, usually that's how I hear it in my head though....so I'm a bit out there .. read moreI love to play with words, usually that's how I hear it in my head though....so I'm a bit out there ;)
If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..