~ Bloom off the fanatical fire...‏

~ Bloom off the fanatical fire...‏

A Poem by Frieda P

Beatifically blistered in your melancholic rose

darkly colored hue of thorn's ambush

verdigris trellis's trailing a sad window pane

bloom off the proverbial conformist flower

fanatical fiery force flipped a final formality,

sprinkled holy water upon the vine    

died a tragic death of subliminal exposure   

© 2014 Frieda P


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Frieda P

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chills.... I am warning off these huge goosebumps all over my arms right now.. where to start... ok first off I love this song and haven't ever quite heard it like this.. I think that is what started the chills, but omg... those words... ma'am... you scare me with the ease and depth at which you affect me sometimes.. it is like your pen is a magic wand and japs me where and how you choose... quite unnerving... but also addictive as I keep coming back for more.. and more... You have such talent and not only for words, and flow, and imagery, but you are able to set this TONE, this ambiance, this MOOD, that whether or not we want to go there, by gosh WE ARE THERE... After you set your magical tone, then we are sucked in with such bewitching language, captivated, dying to see where you take us next, eagerly anticipating the ending.. and once we get there, we are in such states of awe... on a side note, you know I am a sucker for alliteration... can I just say O...M.....G.... I loved it!!! ok, I am rambling.. sorry.. see what you have done to me ma'am?... are you happy?... Ance turned me into a sappy, mushy mess, and then you just made me a goosebump covered, throbbing puddle of conflicted emotions with this one... I hope you two are happy with yourselves... I am going back to my corner, drink a pot of coffee, and TRY to compose myself... in all seriousness, this poem is dark and deliciously disturbing..



Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

AprilRN1210

9 Years Ago

well, I meant every word ma'am... I love the emotional journeys that you bless me with. True, like m.. read more
Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Ha, silly moi...seriously, I'm still elated from your words....woooooooooo!
AprilRN1210

9 Years Ago

I am glad... You deserve that and more ma'am... :)



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I loved your use of repeated first letters. the life of a flowering plant is fragile and you have transposed this really well.
Very good write.
Well done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


had to save this one Freida! its just too good! your words and phrasing are incredible .. :)
E.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Thanks muchly E! :)
I`m beautifully blistered by this poem! K

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Sweet review, thanks Kleio!
Gosh ... I'm speechless !
Tragical yet amazing .
And the music .. wow !


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Why thank you, I'll take a speechless any day...I love Jill Tracy, she's a bit quirky. Thanks Mell.
Mélania Woolf

9 Years Ago

I'm loving her,too lol
You never fail to catch my attention !
Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Listen to this one, you might not like her style...I adore her.

https://www.youtube.com.. read more
I love the aliterations you used. The poem is rich with teeming emotions. A gem indeed!!!!!=))

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Thanks so much Moon, muchly appreciated! :)
As I peer through the window into this piece I feel pain and sorrow. This was a masterful write.

Regards
Troy

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Thanks so much Troy, enjoy your weekend...
A great round of applause for you.. You have beautifully expressed the pain and disguise ..
Very well written.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Thanks so much Ayushi.
Wish her all happiness wherever she is.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Thanks Avinash....
OMG Frieda! :-)

Kaze~ :-)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Big smile here, thanks so much Kazie! :)
♔ CrownedDevil ☾

9 Years Ago

It was my pleasure. :-)
chills.... I am warning off these huge goosebumps all over my arms right now.. where to start... ok first off I love this song and haven't ever quite heard it like this.. I think that is what started the chills, but omg... those words... ma'am... you scare me with the ease and depth at which you affect me sometimes.. it is like your pen is a magic wand and japs me where and how you choose... quite unnerving... but also addictive as I keep coming back for more.. and more... You have such talent and not only for words, and flow, and imagery, but you are able to set this TONE, this ambiance, this MOOD, that whether or not we want to go there, by gosh WE ARE THERE... After you set your magical tone, then we are sucked in with such bewitching language, captivated, dying to see where you take us next, eagerly anticipating the ending.. and once we get there, we are in such states of awe... on a side note, you know I am a sucker for alliteration... can I just say O...M.....G.... I loved it!!! ok, I am rambling.. sorry.. see what you have done to me ma'am?... are you happy?... Ance turned me into a sappy, mushy mess, and then you just made me a goosebump covered, throbbing puddle of conflicted emotions with this one... I hope you two are happy with yourselves... I am going back to my corner, drink a pot of coffee, and TRY to compose myself... in all seriousness, this poem is dark and deliciously disturbing..



Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

AprilRN1210

9 Years Ago

well, I meant every word ma'am... I love the emotional journeys that you bless me with. True, like m.. read more
Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Ha, silly moi...seriously, I'm still elated from your words....woooooooooo!
AprilRN1210

9 Years Ago

I am glad... You deserve that and more ma'am... :)

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If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..

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