~ celestial circumnavigation COLLABORATION~April & Frieda

~ celestial circumnavigation COLLABORATION~April & Frieda

A Poem by Frieda P




Sullen butterfly angel,
            in darkly chained wings
  her thirst for freedom
 never quenched,
 her cravings unqualified for flight
   desiring to soar high above the constellations
 planted in a world of woes & dread instead
  black raven, 
        her only ally in silence's gloomy prayer
             paying for the sins of the father,
 mystic moonlight’s melody
          aims to soothe her soul
  yet somber shadows obscure
   spirit’s faint flicker of hope
           dying from destiny’s betrayal,
 made a wish upon an imploding star
   in hopes of redemption's surrender,
   earth stood its ground
 in her kaleidoscopic reflection,
  stillness within the gravitational pull 
 of anguished atonement
abandoning resignations of despair
 on murky ideations of lifetimes past,
 contemplating celestial circumnavigation
  delegating fate’s intervention
as the symbiotic crow flies in retrospect,
cawing feverishly
                   in sympathetic adulation 






© 2014 Frieda P



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Frieda P

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I've interrupted my own writing, not to mention my boycotting of this site, to be one of the first (for there will be many) to congratulate you two on an absolute masterpiece...tipsiness and two insanely-talented poets are apparently the recipe for a perfect collaboration ;P I'm not surprised in the least...I knew it was only a matter of time before you two misfits put your heads together for just such an occasion ;)

But as soon as I turn my attention to the poem itself, it ceases to be a collab in my mind...your voices were destined for poetic harmony...I knew that they would compliment each other sublimely when I first found out that this was happening...I see, hear, and feel both of you in this piece, but I think it would spoil the fun to point out exactly which elements of each of you I detect haha I'll just say that your combined personalities have meshed in a poignant and powerful piece of poetic bliss...I'm not going to cite certain lines or get into the business of dissecting it...everyone will have their favourite bits for sure...I will simply sit back and marvel at the beauty of my two best friends coming together to compose a piece that just commands the respect of every reader that approaches it...I can't tell you how proud I am of you two for accomplishing this...I was gonna suggest a group hug, but then I thought, no, this is your moment...enjoy it...I know that everyone who reads it will do the same :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Yay, Benji got featured review. :)
AprilRN1210

3 Years Ago

I see that... awesome!! he deserves it... so sweet... loved every word:)
kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

Haha Glad you enjoyed the review girls, and thank you for the group hug ;) It's featured now but I d.. read more



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ANM
A a seamless coupling! Bravo for a dark angel!

Posted 3 Years Ago


AprilRN1210

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much sir... I am tickled that you enjoyed this collab with my dear friend and favorite .. read more
You ladies did an amazing job, and not surprisingly. What was incredible to me was how your two very different styles melded together into one superstyle. I couldn't tell who contributed what, nor did I want to as it seemed as though one entity wrote this. It has aspects of both of your personalities for sure. I saw Frieda as the butterfly, and April as the angel part of this being. Beautifully done ladies, this was truly amazing.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AprilRN1210

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much girl.. I am glad that you enjoyed our first collab of many to come hopefully.. she.. read more
A very good collaboration, I detected little touches of each of you in here that I have come to respect and enjoy, and which gave me little hints at who contributed what. Well done, mes dames!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AprilRN1210

3 Years Ago

yes, Noel... you pay too much attention sometimes.. gotta watch you.. lol
thank you sir.. glad.. read more
NoelHC

3 Years Ago

I tried my last word only scan, it would appear Freida isn't in on your "dirty little secret" ; )
AprilRN1210

3 Years Ago

nope, shhhh my secret...lol
Firstly, kudos to you both...you nailed it so right here and then how do you come up with such a good title, I mean where do those words come from, guess you are walking dictionaries coz I swear there is no way in my hundred years I would think of such a heading, the poem...you blew it, blew me away and noodles review below is the best of all reviews.....

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

The title is actually part of April's words in the poem, I thought it brilliant too, thanks so much .. read more
AprilRN1210

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much! glad you enjoyed.. I am a sucker for alliteration and that's why I chose that wor.. read more
Where to begin..............You have merged like melted chocolate together in this rather reflective, sombre and sad piece. Given you both have similarities this is little surprise. I can sense you both so strongly in this and as a pair to have balance. It has Frieda's ethereality and April's directness and brought together it has a warmth despite the 'black' coating of dark and bitter chocolate. I just ate every last piece!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Woo what a poetic review, thanks so much John, you have some dark chocolate left on your lip there. .. read more
John Alexander McFadyen

3 Years Ago

And................
AprilRN1210

3 Years Ago

haha.. ummmm. yea.. at a loss for words, so will just say "thank you"...:)
I really enjoyed the flow of this piece - your voices meld beautifully here.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Grazie mille Rita...
AprilRN1210

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much.. I am glad you enjoyed.
I have to say, both of your styles blend well to create a piece with a unique style in itself, and both the concept and presentation of the poem is awestriking. Dark as well. A butterfly fluttering across the open air with the illusion of freedom, feeling its hunger for freedom never quenched as it soared across endless skies, yet,facing destiny as an adversity when trying to strive for more freedom. Using the crow as a subtle nod to destiny was also a clever idea as well.
Well done to the both of you!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much Tai, glad you enjoyed our first collaboration together!
AprilRN1210

3 Years Ago

I am with my partner in crime.. Thank you.. we are tickled that you enjoyed... :)
Well you guys certainly knocked this one out the ballpark didn't you? Like, damn you two make a damn fine poetic couple, haha. You guys just knocked my brain out I think... Well done.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Ha, hope it didn't hurt muchly, thanks Kayleigh! :)
AprilRN1210

3 Years Ago

Thanks girl.. glad you enjoyed... Frieda is a dream to work with:)
Hahaha my two faves and this wonderful display of writing...how excellent this was to read.

Imagery, structure, tone, feel this one has it all ladies.

Regards
Troy

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much Troy, jazz'd you enjoyed our collaboration. :)
AprilRN1210

3 Years Ago

hey Troy.. thank you... you are so sweet.. I am glad you enjoyed.
I had to read twice, then I read again and again, then I decided this is masterpiece!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

3 Years Ago

Wow thanks so much Mayank, muchly appreciated!
AprilRN1210

3 Years Ago

Thank you, am glad you enjoyed it..

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