Sledgehammer ~

Sledgehammer ~

A Poem by Frieda P
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Abstract painting ~ Sharon Sieben

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You perceived me as whole, 
   proceeded to tear my essence apart
like  a sledgehammer you wore me down
    crazy glued my exhibited heart to you,  
the pieces were recognizably flawed
    carried on to sculpt your next Venus de milo

© 2014 Frieda P


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Frieda P

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The thing that never ceases to impress me is how you can catch such fleeting emotion and put it into words. I just tried went: Go on and sad Rene what you thinking? sepulchral silence nothing . So when I try to imagine how you are able to trap impressions of painted emotions that on top they are imprinted with real life experiences, lessons learnt, I even felt the "on your way " "off you go" in this lines. I would have to read like ten book and go from two hundred lines to one fifty just to be able to explain what you just shared with me.

Baffled

Thankyou

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

You're a charmer Rene, your sweet words make me smile, baffled? That makes two of us, I'm forever c.. read more
Rene Salinas

9 Years Ago

The fact that you can see clearly through me is also a little scary, you laides are too astute
Frieda P

9 Years Ago

We put in a lot of hours haha....besides I'm a witch didn'tcha know? ;)



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Not sure I should respond to this........But the sentiment is captured in 'Speaking to the Clouds' Which is not about you as you know. Struggling 'artists' do get frustrated with their creations and want to start the next bust and make it perfect. When we seek a safe place and it resists allowing us to land, we panic and look for somewhere else to flee. Nice analogy.

Posted 9 Years Ago


There some who treat love as an art form, always needing to paint a new masterpiece then stick in the closet and paint another. Masterfully worded.

Posted 9 Years Ago


An excellent work inspired by an excellent song.

Posted 9 Years Ago


So beautifully expressed...this is as beautiful as the sculpture itself....

"the pieces were recognizably flawed
carried on to sculpt your next Venus de milo"

Says it all... An unforgettable write Frieda...


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Thanks so much Divya, jazz'd you enjoyed my friend....
Brilliant work as always love...as I've said countless times, you have an incredible knack for giving words to visual art and bringing them to life in your own unique way...xo

Ha The sledgehammers that wear you down are the best ones Mrs.R ;) Now if I could only find one of those fruit cages...

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

That must be a specialty sledgehammer...fruit cages can be found in Dali's imagination if you know w.. read more
kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

Haha Oh I figure the imagination thing went without saying ;) xo
your poetic blade is swift and precise .. cuts me to the quick ... i hurt and hope it helps .. in this mystery of life .. i am taken by "Sledgehammer" ... you hit me where it counts .. your voice, the painting and the music are perfect says i ... i am affected by this poem ..
E.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Hope it didn't hurt too much E...you know I'm always taken with your reviews....grazie sweetie. x
That's the problem with winning a woman's heart by using a sledgehammer.... you leave too many broken pieces and she becomes more broken than ALIVE!!! Whole and wanting to be in love is always better (in my opinion) than in pieces and "crazy glued" to someones heart.. even though at times it seems that love has signed it's name on every single sledgehammer there is. "KABONG"!!! Besides, how is it possible to love someone up close and personal like with no arms (as in Venus di Milo)???

I love this song by P.Gabriel cause the heart of it was "I shed my skin, this is the new stuff", it was the reinventing himself and his music, he was becoming more consciously aware of the world's suffering [especially in Aparthaid S. Africa] and transforming it into music.. and this sometimes takes a sledgehammer to do)

Anyway, It's true what Rene says below, you are able to take an art work and music and turn them into personal testimonials to not only your life, but to make new visions of art in words... very cool indeed!!
~~redzone xoxox



Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

redflutterby

9 Years Ago

Ditto.... ;-P
redzone

9 Years Ago

NOW, that was a really good one Frieda. Still laughing at this one... I love you Frieda and conside.. read more
kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

Haha I'm too easy, and too drunk...the best of both worlds, right Mrs.R? MWAH ;)
Haha.. ok... first off, let me say, I haven't ever heard this song.. this video is kinda spooky.. lol
I mean really... didn't know If should run or giggle..

As always, you have managed to create a tone, move the reader and tell a story in such few words..
The first line is one that touched me more than anything... how true... most people never take the time and care to see "deep" enough... they just see what they want to see and make assumptions based on that.. how sad... but so common... "perceived as whole".. can relate to this...
then you use the power of a "sledgehammer".. I mean they meant business didn't they.. jeez... they do "crazy glue" us to them huh?... it feels as if you are a part of them and if ever taken apart will not be able to function again... those flawed pieces are more beautiful than most ma'am... let em move on.. didn't realize the priceless, rare masterpiece they had!!! good riddance!! another lovely write...



Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AprilRN1210

9 Years Ago

true girl... and haven't seen that one, will have to check it out as well.. thanks for the suggestio.. read more
Frieda P

9 Years Ago

I think that might have been the original 'chicken' dance in that video too. :)
kublakhan27

9 Years Ago

No, that was me haha ;P
This painting is amazing but not more than this enchanting poem. Loved the way you have painted depth and emotions here.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Thanks Zahra, muchly appreciate the sentiment.
The thing that never ceases to impress me is how you can catch such fleeting emotion and put it into words. I just tried went: Go on and sad Rene what you thinking? sepulchral silence nothing . So when I try to imagine how you are able to trap impressions of painted emotions that on top they are imprinted with real life experiences, lessons learnt, I even felt the "on your way " "off you go" in this lines. I would have to read like ten book and go from two hundred lines to one fifty just to be able to explain what you just shared with me.

Baffled

Thankyou

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

9 Years Ago

You're a charmer Rene, your sweet words make me smile, baffled? That makes two of us, I'm forever c.. read more
Rene Salinas

9 Years Ago

The fact that you can see clearly through me is also a little scary, you laides are too astute
Frieda P

9 Years Ago

We put in a lot of hours haha....besides I'm a witch didn'tcha know? ;)

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