The knife

Looks are what got me killed.Money is what got me killed .Jealouse is what got me killed.All of these are therioes you'll just have to see which is true.
I had a motive you'll just have to read and see.

This is the girl from my Past
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The Wedding
Some people have kids just for the attention.
Some people get married to people they bearley know just because the gave them an affection look .

To death do you part the preist said . To death do we part we say in unison.She said "cross my heart and hope to die.I smile and say"cross my heart and hope to die. I think cross your heart I hope you die.

Her friend ran up I'm so jealous I wish there was some one out there for me .She groans well congratulations she winks at me and goes back to join her friends

Hey come cut the cake her mother said . My wife said hurry up hubbie she grabs my hand and hands me the knife her you cut it .
The knife shakes in my hand and I cut it.This is if she sighted the deal with death. The saying is true till DEATH do we part my love.

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

Hello Parker. You have some good ideas, and lean toward character based, rather than plot based, writing. What you need to do to present a coherent story is flesh out the details, use a good spell check and grammar program to correct minor mistakes. Pick a tense and stick with it, it will help make your writing much more effective. I am a person who is willing to help if you ask, but if you'd prefer not, just say the word and I won't critique.

[Parker101]

Thanks for the advice