Perspective

Perhaps I knew all along,

A plan weaved from within.

Perhaps I acted in instinct,

A doe protecting fawn.

But it doesn't matter now

Blood thick on my hands

Who will stop to consider the intention?

Perhaps I deserve this fate,

Rough fibers weave around my neck.

Perhaps I am wronged,

An externality of mankind's faults.

But it doesn't matter now

The rope tightens

And the floor beneath me falls.

Reviews

[Blu]

A typical, If I can phrase it this way, tale. Not in a negative way. Boldly tragic, the poem speaks for itself in a loud voice; a man reasoning his own actions, trying to dig deeper into himself, with clever and witty wordage, as he sees himself leap and fall. I see this poem as a epigraph for a grandiose novel, as a prequel of one's ultimate actions, sacrifices.
Experience of deaths and flaws in people have driven him wary and self-alerted, and at the needlepoint of his passing, he doubts everything.
Human nature, it is commonly called. I find this poem to be a great example of one.

[fwvalidus]

Thanks for your review Blu! Quite a lot of thought you have put into your feedback which I greatly appreciate. My intention is to have the reader think about this one and decide themselves whether the viewpoint character is guilty, innocent, or rather somewhere in the grey zone. Is it metaphorical or is it literal? Up to you to decide.

[Samantha Croix]

Very good story. Definitely made me think in a way that other pieces haven't. I appreciate the style in which it is written and the way that you broke the stanzas up. I think that it adds emphasis in just the right places witch tremendously helps the piece.

[fwvalidus]

Thanks for reviewing - let me know if there is a piece of yours that you'd like an extra pair of eyes on

Cheers

[Jack Cassidy]

The ending was very interestingly put. "The rope tightens and the floor beneath me falls." Very clever.

[fwvalidus]

Thanks, definitely my favourite part of this poem is the end, those two lines

[Charlotte Noir]

I find it interesting, especially the first and last verses have an impressing power over ones feelings. It has a particular beauty that seems to come from deep within. I really likes it:)

[fwvalidus]

Thanks for stopping by to read :) I hope you can enjoy my other works as well

[DaughterofHonor]

Amazing poem.
Favourite line(s) are definitely the first two, as that is what sets the tone for the rest of the writing.
I encourage you to continue to write on controversial subjects as you seem to be able to apply the lesser viewed side with concise accuracy.

[fwvalidus]

Thank you very much for your review, I found that this poem was on of those pieces that just seemed to write itself once my mind got on the subject. I hope to get inspiration for more poems here and there as I work on my shorts.

[Marie]

Whe the trapdoor opens, it no longer matters who was right and who was wrong.

[fwvalidus]

You are very correct in this

[Mark Heathcote]

A good write on a heavy subject, well written!

[fwvalidus]

Thank you very much Mark!

[Susan McCaskill]

I like this; short and concise, yet it manages to convey a wealth of feeling.

[fwvalidus]

I'm glad you enjoyed it, thanks for the review!

[jwenjwen]

i find this sad :( you must be a good writer :)

[fwvalidus]

Oh thank you very much, how flattering :)

[jwenjwen]

you're welcome :)