Someone Else

Someone Else

A Story by gabiaimee
"

I can imagine someone else.

"
"I can't imagine you with anyone else" 
I can imagine someone else. 
Eventually he'll be tall and maybe he'll be blonde, but no matter what he'll look like I'll love him just the same. He'll be quiet I'm sure, but he'll always be listening. I'll hold his hand, keep him safe, and comfort him when he needs me. Cradling him in my arms, I'll feel a love more pure than I ever knew existed. 
But he can wait. I want you to myself for at least ten more years. Even then, I'll love you more each day than I did the day before. 
In time he will be another piece of my life, and evidently a piece of yours. When I'll look at him, all I'll see is you in his smile, his eyes, and his laughter. I can only hope not to see parts of myself in him, too. I'd much rather he be the spitting image of you than at all noticeably related to me. Even if he looks like me, grows up like me, or thinks like me, I'll always know he's part of you, too and I'll think of you and your stormy irises every time I look at him.  I'll stare in amazement at the most beautiful boy I've ever seen and I'll thank all the stars in the universe that he inherited his father's eyes and not mine.

© 2015 gabiaimee


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Wow that is amazing. From the start I knew you were comparing someone to someone else who was close to her. This is amazing and I loved it. The last line was beautiful and the way you describe the eyes allows the reader to imagine the son and father. Great job and keep up the good work :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


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its beautiful how it describes the lover the a woman sees in her son....loved it a lot... good job!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow that is amazing. From the start I knew you were comparing someone to someone else who was close to her. This is amazing and I loved it. The last line was beautiful and the way you describe the eyes allows the reader to imagine the son and father. Great job and keep up the good work :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Wow, I thought at first it was about a person breaking up with another, but boy was I wrong. This poem just makes you fall in love with it - or maybe I did because I can relate to it. That first line tells a story that inevitably ends in heartbreak; but the following lines tell a different story altogether. They tell a story of a future in the form of a little boy created by the love of two people. This is wonderful.

Two things though - "laughter" --> you missed the T.
- change all the present tense words to future tense cause you're talking about a child who's not yet in this world ^_^

Posted 8 Years Ago


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gabiaimee

8 Years Ago

Ah thank you for catching those!
Wow! I wasn't expecting the ending to be the way you wrote this. Such I lovely piece here Gabiaimee, touching, tender, sweet, sad. A very emotional piece, written well.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Honest and touching! I like the flow of your writing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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A very thoughtful and touching piece. A great read.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Added on July 7, 2015
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Tags: love, family, son, child, children, baby, relationship, future, life, mother, father, parenthood, smile, eyes, laughter, genetics, mom, dad, prose, poem

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