Forget Me Not

A True friend is for life but in this poem, a friend is not just for life but for even after that. A friend lost his life and now he's asking his buddy to forget him and move on...

FORGET ME NOT

When you look up in the sky,

Are you looking up for me?

I’m just about to cry,

Will you make it up to me?

 

Remember? Yesterday I was there,

By your warm side,

If anything went wrong,

In your arms I used to hide…

 

Special! felt my name,

Whenever you called me,

It never felt the same,

You! I always wanted to be…

 

Perfect it would have been,

If only I had stayed longer,

Days would have been passing away,

With stomach-aching laughter…

 

Forget me not,

I’ll be by your side,

That little bicycle,

We always used to ride…

Stop this nonsense,

Stop weeping all the time,

I am not dead in your heart,

I am only dead in your eyes…

 

God says ‘this is just a game’,

He wants us to play,

He likes my company,

So he wants me to stay…

 

Don’t worry!

I’ll fight with him,

For you I’ll be stubborn,

He’ll bow down my longings,

For you are my tasty bun…

 

I think the sun rises and sets on you,

Whatever you wanted,

All those things now I want you to do,

Stop looking up in the sky,

Look down and keep singing the song,

Someday I’ll be there again,

In your arms where I belong…

 

Forget me not,

Only remember me in your prayer,

That’s how I feel alive,

That’s how I would know that you care…

 

I just like to sit,

And watch you all day long,

Captivating innocence,

I won’t let anybody do you wrong…

 

Now take this time in your hands,

Turn my stories into your poetries,

Sing them along when you think of me,

And ring those bells of joy and let others see…

 

Dive into the ocean of belief and hope,

Don’t think you’ll drown,

I’m here and there with you all the time,

On your head like a crown,

So don’t worry,

I won’t let you be frowned…

 

 

Now stop looking up,

In the sky,

Never ever,

I would want you to cry…

 

Want to see you rising up,

Like an unfathomable tide,

When you forget me completely,

And put your worries aside…

Reviews

[Wordydistance]

This is too long, and it gets boring. The begining is...You rhyme me with me. Then you find something in the middle, and it's actually really touching, but the by the end you've lost me. It starts to go all over the place. Instead of suggestions for individual lines I suggest you cut out the begining and anything in the second half that seems repetative. I like the image of God bowing down to you.

[Gaurav Walia]

I'll keep these things in my mind from next time.. Thanks for your valuable feedback!

[Ohhhwillow]

Forget me not, I'll be by your side - this is my favourite line. I'm sorry for your loss; and pleased by your desire to share it with others. I think this piece might improve with a little shortening, just to compliment the force of what you are saying. Obviously, there is so so so much to be said, but that is often why we cannot say it; a lack of words sometimes says more kinda thing.. Anyway, I commend you on this piece. Nice work, and keep practising. Writing about your feelings is great!

[Gaurav Walia]

That's my favorite part too.. Thanks for reading. I appreciate it..

[Flutterby aish]

I honestly like this one because we have read poems where someone misses a dead person. But this was different about a dead person feeling something which was penned down beautifully by you. A line or two you lost the essence a bit :p but its ok. We learn from our mistakes only to produce something better the next time and even better another time. I really liked this one truly and it touched my heart! Thankyou for sharing and keep writing!

[Gaurav Walia]

If I have such sweet people like you reading my poems then I am sure I'll keep writing...
read moreIf I have such sweet people like you reading my poems then I am sure I'll keep writing...

Thanks a mill :)

[Flutterby aish]

Your Welcome :)