Taking You For Granted

Life twists and turns like a river. Maybe i think about this to much but i am happy i do.

Clouds clouding my visions

Friends trying my patience

Your love impacting my next decision

Being in your arms seem like one heck of a revelation

Waiting for change wasn't in my intentions

God knows I need an intervention

But you're worth it

Sorry It took me so long to realize it

In a world that is so black and white

Some how you seem to outshine it all

Never felt this high in life

Looking over the problems that surround us

Looking into your eyes and saying it was  worth it

Heart shattered and destroyed

I refuse to let go

Not until I let you know

Loving you was never easy

But I do and letting you go

Isn't in me

I may hate you today

To love you tomorrow

Time doesn't heal wounds but buried them

Every time I see you a shovel is always at work

I talk about you because It hurts to lose

Knowing deep down Its my fault we're over

Looking at the clock as I fool

Myself into thinking about a second chances

Life Isn't a video game there are no continues

Maybe one day i'll think twice before taking a second glance

Reviews

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Idk about a world that's only black and white...
definitely has some gray areas for me at least.

Anywho, this was definitely something to read and really enjoyed it... made me wanna kick back and listen to sum MethodMan:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bGGez0CObXs

Was really chilled when reading it... the poem was certainly a good monologue. The first two stanzas had rhyme/beat down to a wire like tooth-floss, which is a little something worth of high-praising. Don't know how many writers there are who refuse to write poetry with a rhythm or a beat or just simply can't do it (something you just gotta have an ear for).
There's definitely potential for some good metaphorical stuff here, if anything just needs to be brought out through diggin a little deeper. Ain't nothing wrong with deep poetry, especially when that's what poetry is all about (emotional prevalence to your audience), so don't feel a need to hold back when going through and writing. That's what revising is for: reconsideration.
Definitely dig the topics here you're juggling with... things like infatuation and rethinking memories. Though, romance is probably a killed over topic for poetry... so many people have done it, in every sorta way. But, by no means is that any sorta figuring on the poem you've written here, but rather only a heads up that topics are something else in poetry that really takes some deep contemplation.
But this poem, Awesome write? absolutely. no joke bro

But with praise, must come some constructive criticism... as stated earlier within the review, the first and second stanza definitely had a definitive beat/rhythm easy to point out, but it soon become lost in stanza 3... things to help out with this is try writing with a syllable count, or do some research on some formal structures of poetry that require a syllable count to be written right. Syllable counts greatly increase the probability and ability to keep a rhythm throughout and also helps give way for variation when it comes to word choice due to its limiting nature.
One place you can learn various types of formal structures is here:
http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/types.html

Also, another hint to give out is that most people don't realize, but Free-Verse is essentially one of the hardest forms of poetry there is out there. Probably THE hardest would be Prose-Poetry, which is the next step up in my book. So what I'm saying is, don't feel down... and what I see here definitely has potential, and always willing to work with people on the side in my free time so hit me up with a inbox/message if you got any questions or need help with anything.
I'd rather not go into too much detail with constructive criticism, but feel free if you need, to ask through a message to elaborate on what more can be edited/revised in the poem if wanted and I'll surely make way on doing that.
Overall, gotta give it a 95/100 yo. Positively was some good stuff bro. Enjoyed reading it and hope to hear more from ya. keep up the good work.

[Lady Of The Wolves]

wow... great poem!

[Sashalee]

i love it :)

[Cassie Fraga]

oooohhh Skittles... I love the realization here... the longing of what was lost, learning from mistakes, your piece flowed so deep with emotion and expressed purely!! I appreciate that!! thank you for sharing!! = )
**write... write on...**