Mirror, Mirror

That couldn't be me

Was that really me?

I washed my

ugly face,

Erasing the

salty tracks

of my tears.

I stared

at myself.

Fat face.

Zits everywhere.

Big nose.

Uneven eyes.

Yellow teeth.

I can’t stand

this.

I have so many

imperfections.

I am drowning

in my

flaws.

Author's Note

We all have those moments. I don't think this way of myself, I am just expressing a strong emotion. Please leave a review!

Reviews

[Matt ...]

Simple too the point, yet comprehensive in tone.

what I liked: you mostly sticked to short words, it actually added quite a bit to this poem. Those words created a quick rhythm that mimics the panic and demotion of a moment like feeling down on yourself. By the end of this poem we do feel a connection because this is a place we have all been. It explored the subject matter well.

what I disliked: I would have chosen a broader subject matter, but I can't tell you what to write about. This caused a problem with redundancy. Between "Yellow teeth." and "I am drowning" needs to be cut. The rhythm doesn't take a hit there and why say out loud what you have already told us so well through tone. It is like when you sit down to watch a television show on dvd, but the cocksuckers didn't take the time to remove the recap between each episode, so you are stuck being reminded of what happened less then four minutes ago. There is no need for it.

Reading your biography I see you are 13 and new, welcome :D. You have a lot of talent and some skills I certainly did not have at your age. Keep writing.

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[DearSweetAgony]

Wow. I think that everyone has felt this way before.
I adore the undeniable truth of this beautifully executed
write.I really loved the end("I am drowning in my flaws")
It's such a beautiful poem.
Great Job!

[Danielle Nicole]

Very well done, it's easy to relate to this because we all have those days where we look at ourselves and hate what we see. You will always have insecurities abput yourself, for one I hate my arms and my face >.< but I've learned to love my flaws and accept them as a part of me because you'll never be perfect when you keep trying to change yourself :) i loved it

[Awkward]

Yes, we all have those moments when we think everything about us is ugly and unappealing. Good job, you really embodied that in this poem. Short simple lines really accentuated the meaning of the poem. Thank you for sharing with us.

[r]

Exactly how I feel sometimes, just absolutely hating the way I look. At least I dont have lots of acne, and my eyes are about the same. My teeth are weird no matter how much I brush them [never ever drink soda. it ruins you. -.-], and my face isnt too fat, not really.

I have my moments when I think I am pretty, but usually I feel like this poem - like I am drowning in my flaws, all those little, or big, imperfections. I try not to think about it and just be myself, but in front of people, and sometimes even by myself, i feel so selfconscious.

Well written, I know there are a lot of people who can relate, not just girls either.