can you hear me now?

uhmm, be quiet.

do you hear what i say?

are my words too small?

do i talk too soft?

or do you just not care,

to hear me at all?

my speech is drowning,

in a pool of more interesting

things. i'm too boring.

i'm too shy.

every time i think of something

sad, i cry.

no one wants to listen,

to my important words.

they do not care,

they nod me off.

when i open my mouth,

they start to scoff.

do you hear me now?

do you hear my cries?

as these tears flow 

out of my eyes?

do you feel my pain?

did your head perk in alarm?

as i painfully slice this razor,

up and down my arm. 

Reviews

[Frieda P]

Wasn't expecting that ending....distressing that you need to bleed for other's. Self harm has run rampant it seems, your screams and soft voice are heard here.

[Aysia]

Thank you so much :)

[Tex]

Wow! this is a great write!

(I know a girl who did fall into the habit of cutting... please don't even try it, it took years for her to stop the habit and has left scares that will never go away).

OK, back to your great write, This was amazing I never saw the ending coming. It started out so innocent, a teen being ignored (by one or more adults?) and totally surprises at the end. This fits the reality of this problem because the adults never see it coming. Often not knowing it is happening until months, sometimes years, after it started.

Very well crafted, well composed, I just loved the shocker at the end.

High marks from me on this one... you have a real talent.

Nick

[Aysia]

Thanks so so much!

[Evyna]

I also have a friend who turned to cutting. But this poem was pure genius! The beginning describes me well...

[Tex]

well, keep using your writing as a healthy outlet and find an adult to share your writing with even if just a counselor at school. I care deeply for the kids your age in my life and I understand a lot of what they go through and I am 54... so there are some around you who will care too. it is a win win... you provide them with a remembrance of youth, they provide you with insights that can only come from experience.

[Aysia]

Thanks everyone :)