Cold

Cold

A Poem by Ann Elise Monte
"

I have to write a few songs for music class, and this is one I just finished. It's kind of rough.

"

There's a chill in the air.

The wind whips through my hair

As I stand alone

Thinking of your smile.

 

I always wanted to be your friend

And I'll be there 'till the end,

But only I know

I want so much more than that.

 

But without you I feel so cold,

Full of loneliness that's so old.

When you're gone, I turn to ice.

I'll keep my secret,

But my heart's the price.

 

Without me, I know you're fine

But you're always on my mind.

I wish you didn't have your girl,

But I won't ruin what you have.

 

Like a glacier in the sun

I melt when we're having fun.

You chase the cold away

With just one laugh.

 

But without you I feel so cold,

Full of loneliness that's so old.

When you're gone, I turn to ice.

I'll keep my secret

But my heart's the price.

 

And now I'm still here,

Pushing away my fear.

Because even though I love you,

I don't belong in your summer world.

 

But without you I feel so cold,

Full of loneliness that's so old.

When you're gone, I turn to ice.

I'll keep my secret

But my heart's the price.

 

But without you I feel so cold,

Full of loneliness that's so old.

When you're gone, I turn to ice.

I'll keep my secret

But my heart's the price.

 

 


© 2011 Ann Elise Monte



Author's Note

Ann Elise Monte
Image by LaChatRose on DeviantArt (link: http://lachatrose.deviantart.com/art/Cold-Sexuality-168318943?q=1&qo=1 )

The rhythm probably seems off when read like this, but I think I've found my rhythm when singing it :)

I haven't found a way to embed the sound file that doesn't involve wading through mountains of code that make me go cross-eyed, so if anyone can help me there I'd greatly appreciate it.

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Love the way this sounds. I like poems with deep meaning, but if they sound stiff and overdone then they have no point. There is meaning here as well, like how when we are seperated from people sometimes knowledge that they don't need us makes it worse.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Cold is an excellent song. the lyrics are fine , the rythm will find its place once you set it to musical chords...... try using the key of G on the piano then play these chords in sequence...A minor..C... G....E....F.. using 4/4 time on the rythm. repeat the chords on the next stanza. and using A minor...C......D....and ...F for the chorus.

Posted 5 Years Ago


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This was pretty good. It was an interesting read. Really got the sense of a broken heart from it. I can imagine it as a song. Too bad you can't post a sound file. I'm sure it would sound great.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Rhythm sound excellent to me reading, wished I could hear you sing it! well done!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love the way this sounds. I like poems with deep meaning, but if they sound stiff and overdone then they have no point. There is meaning here as well, like how when we are seperated from people sometimes knowledge that they don't need us makes it worse.

Posted 6 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

A powerful poem. Easy to feel alone and cold when separated from people we need.
"When you're gone, I turn to ice.
I'll keep my secret
But my heart's the price."
A outstanding poem. Easy to feel old and cold when wishing for the heart to know peace.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

thats good

Posted 7 Years Ago


I ike the absolute honest expression of emotion which itself is a melody contributing beautifully to the rhythm patterns~

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Ann Elise Monte
Ann Elise Monte

Fantasyland, beside a mass grave of dead story ideas, Australia



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I write Young Adult fiction and my longer works tend to contain strong fantasy and romantic elements. My shorter works have more variety because I find it easier to maintain non-magical stories for sh.. more..

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