Mmm, I like it! I'll give it 97, but not 100 because "remember" is repeated a lot and that kind of halts the storyline to the poem. Otherwise, I like that it's straight forward, and that I can understand the beating by a partner. I like the way it sounds in my head and it's got a calm anger and sadness to it all at once, a vulnerability.
WoW. A Power packed piece. Sad to say, I can relate, but I don't let stuff like that keep me down. It's past stuff anyways, no need to dwell, though sometimes the memories resurface...I certainly hope this is a fictional piece, but if not...you're not alone darlin. Things tend to get better over time, you just gotta be tough. As far as your poetry goes, written well, rolls off the tongue, and causes a strong reaction. 100/100
Posted 10 Months Ago
10 Months Ago
Thank you. Time heals most wounds...most. I'm glad you like it, it was originally a prose piece but .. read moreThank you. Time heals most wounds...most. I'm glad you like it, it was originally a prose piece but I thought it would work better as a poem so I changed a few things and seperated it into stanzas.
Sweetheart I just hope this isn't true, because you deserve to be safe in a relationship. This was touching, and amazingly written. It tugs at my heartstrings, because my aunt went through the same thing. Wow, that was beautifully awful
Aesthetically perrrrrfect. With a billion "r"s. And SPaG is, of course, impeccable. Quite rare on this site. The last stanza is a great way to keep momentum and resolve the poem.
Hi! My pen name is Isabelle Faye but you can call me Isabelle or Belle for short. I'm an under 18 year old writer from the United States. I write both poetry and books/novels but the latter tend to pr.. more..