Aphrodite

My personal Aphrodite

Fills my lungs with feathers,

Black doves that can't see;

Feathered Fates; shudders

As they see castles and

Springtime roses stand.

 

I see colors as bright

and clear, as to the grey

bland fog; given light

like a candle in the night, dismay

my thoughts of pain

and drought. I have no shame.

 

When I feel her touch,

I feel horses stampede;

Pulsing rivers in my veins.

She knows me so much,

As I her, but we will succeed;

For in our hearts, love reigns.

Author's Note

It has a few references that you might not know:
Aphrodite - Greek goddess of love, beauty, and sexuality; myrtles, doves, sparrows, horses, and swans are sacred to her.
Fates - from Greek and Roman mythology; 3 blind, dark creatures that see past, present, and future
black doves - from a myth of Dodona; in Greek religion, the oldest oracle, in inland Epirus, near modern Janina, sacred to Zeus and Dione. According to Herodotus, an old oak tree there became an oracle when a black dove, from Egyptian Thebes, settled on it. Priestesses interpreted the rustling of the tree's leaves, the cooing of doves, and the clanging of brass vessels that were hung from the tree's branches. Also doves are favored by Aphrodite
Red roses - symbol of love among many cultures
Rivers - symbol of cleansing, renewal, and life itself amung many cultures including Christianity

Reviews

[Holiday Sparkle]

Nice. I really like the first two lines.
For me, the structure was a little confusing, like it could have flowed better.
Like maybe the and in the 5th line could be removed.
but that is just my advice, or personal taste.
I really do like this poem. It has a unqiue feel to it, and I have not read anything like it.

[Morrigan Nicole]

I've always been a big fan of Greek and roman mythology!

[sentimental~ galore]

I am taken back by the depth of the poetry, and left completely breathless. I mean I’ve never read something with such devotion and compassion. It honestly made my heart fly to an entirely different galaxy. Just to have such a comparison as Aphrodite is far too much to ask for. There are so many beautiful symbols in this poem, and especially the fact that you connected it to greek mythology. I am so fond of greek mythology, and the whole subject itself is so romantic and poetic so to have such a deep comparison brings so much joy to my world. goodness I only wish I had the perfect words to analyze such a work. You should know you’re a remarkable writer, and even more so an amazing romantic sap…This is one of your best works, and there are so many wonderful choice of words and thoughts. I felt the most uplifting feelings one could experience while reading this…the desire and passion is so evident and real that its overwhelming in such a beautiful way. gosh I wish I had the perfect words….sadly I just can’t match up anything to such a high level of love. love you. :)