My life

My life

A Poem by lavina k.
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One of my poems which i wrote only to describe my intense feelings...:)

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My life has different colors

With the one that always cared

It has the trueness of honesty

With the one that always flared

It has its own fragrance

With the one that always shared

It has meaning of ambiance

With the one that always faired

 

Its something that can't be described

But it has something that can be visualize

 

I have no words to show its happiness

It seemed of something  that have no

CURVES

 

But my life never stands

Free of scratches

But still my life holds

Many of its branches…


© 2010 lavina k.



Author's Note

lavina k.
I would love it if you review it with your words.
From many days i have left writing and now again will start for regular intervals with a promise to renew my thoughts with different topics.

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Firstly, I have to say... the blue cursive font threw me off and made it hard to focus on the poem itself... I have trouble focusing anyway, but I had to go back and read many of the lines over again. Oh oh! End of the second stanza... Did you mean "visualized"? Also in the third stanza, second line... I think you might have meant "has" instead of "have". As for the poem itself, I like the feel of it. I think the very first line kind of leads the reader away, perhaps substituting the word "colors" with "branches", like at the end? The word colors threw me off a bit is all. I really like this piece overall, it was quite well-written.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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i think it is very well written. however, it would be nice to just read it in regular font.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Excellent….
The imagery….very apt..
And the choice of words and their arrangements…
Beautiful….
Just beautiful…


Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Intriguing and imaginative.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Firstly, I have to say... the blue cursive font threw me off and made it hard to focus on the poem itself... I have trouble focusing anyway, but I had to go back and read many of the lines over again. Oh oh! End of the second stanza... Did you mean "visualized"? Also in the third stanza, second line... I think you might have meant "has" instead of "have". As for the poem itself, I like the feel of it. I think the very first line kind of leads the reader away, perhaps substituting the word "colors" with "branches", like at the end? The word colors threw me off a bit is all. I really like this piece overall, it was quite well-written.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice...we are all flowing within this universal creation of life...and there is where we incur all the colors, scratches, and experiments of...life

nice work...

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A perfect portrait of the way people's live are different from others. The way we see things amy be very different from even the person who we know the best but that does not stop us from loving them still. A very beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing with me :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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RJM
a good poem to describe a life that would become more beautiful. Even if storms come and abuse you! good work.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Visual yes, writing yes, Over all a wonderful yes!
Enjoyed this very much...

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

its definitely a nice poem..i love the way you describe your life, its great!!! =D

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I likw it, true life is not perfect, but we go through it anyway. it reminds me of a saying "My life has all the characters, but I'm still trying to figure out the plot."

Posted 6 Years Ago



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lavina k.

jaipur, India



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